for Poetic Physics3/4/2011 c1 
179NearlyPrescient
very interesting idea that certainly lends its self well to poetry.
that said, I think the poem might read better with punctuation, so as to know where things continue and where the stronger pauses are. at the same time, though, the content matches the unpunctuated form in that it's just all connected and working together. it feels like you capture something important in punctuation-less form. I suppose that's not really all that helpful, but it's at least something to think about. great work
179NearlyPrescientvery interesting idea that certainly lends its self well to poetry.
that said, I think the poem might read better with punctuation, so as to know where things continue and where the stronger pauses are. at the same time, though, the content matches the unpunctuated form in that it's just all connected and working together. it feels like you capture something important in punctuation-less form. I suppose that's not really all that helpful, but it's at least something to think about. great work