for Days With Desmond7/28/2011 c20 
2Twistedin2Delusions
So twins, huh? I don't think that's too predictable. I mean I didn't think of it. I thought they were actually only going to have one. The sex of the babies can be predictable if you look at it a certain way. I mean usually in books when this happens one is a boy and one is a girl. And I know just about as much as you do about pregnancy: the mom gets fat while carrying them and then gives a painful birth. Anyway I can't wait to see what her dad does to Desmond. Or how their moms react. ;)
2Twistedin2DelusionsSo twins, huh? I don't think that's too predictable. I mean I didn't think of it. I thought they were actually only going to have one. The sex of the babies can be predictable if you look at it a certain way. I mean usually in books when this happens one is a boy and one is a girl. And I know just about as much as you do about pregnancy: the mom gets fat while carrying them and then gives a painful birth. Anyway I can't wait to see what her dad does to Desmond. Or how their moms react. ;)
7/28/2011 c19 1twirlingtwirlingfalling
One big thing you need to fix. Is instead of "the paraplegics tromped up the stairs." It should be "the paramedics tromped up the stairs." Paraplegics can't walk...BIG BIG difference.
Otherwise keep writing : )
1twirlingtwirlingfallingOne big thing you need to fix. Is instead of "the paraplegics tromped up the stairs." It should be "the paramedics tromped up the stairs." Paraplegics can't walk...BIG BIG difference.
Otherwise keep writing : )
7/27/2011 c18 17Lady of romance world88
Hi. It's very beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I am so glad to hear that Jay and Michelle pass their tests. Yay! :D I think Michelle will be good doctor if she want to. I am hope that Michelle will follow her heart and be passion over her job choices that she want to be. :) OMG Michelle is in bad mood. Poor Michelle. :( I am glad to see that Michelle and Jay are partners to do their project on nerves. Thats sound so interest. :) I understand how Michelle felt and I always felt sick whenever I see blood on murder scene. Thats make me sick. :( OMG! Michelle broke down in sobs front of Jay. Hmm... Thats must be sympoths of pregnancy. And I am wonder if Michelle knew about it? OMG! Desmond is very piss off over Jay. I am wonder why Desmond dislike Jay so much? Its amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it and I am off to read it later tonight or tomorrow. :) Sorry if I haven't update my story because I was busily edit the prologue and the chapter 21 now so check the prologue when you have time. And chapter 23 will be up soon when I will be finish edit chapter 22 so be patient with me. Forgive me being make you wait so long. :(
17Lady of romance world88Hi. It's very beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I am so glad to hear that Jay and Michelle pass their tests. Yay! :D I think Michelle will be good doctor if she want to. I am hope that Michelle will follow her heart and be passion over her job choices that she want to be. :) OMG Michelle is in bad mood. Poor Michelle. :( I am glad to see that Michelle and Jay are partners to do their project on nerves. Thats sound so interest. :) I understand how Michelle felt and I always felt sick whenever I see blood on murder scene. Thats make me sick. :( OMG! Michelle broke down in sobs front of Jay. Hmm... Thats must be sympoths of pregnancy. And I am wonder if Michelle knew about it? OMG! Desmond is very piss off over Jay. I am wonder why Desmond dislike Jay so much? Its amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it and I am off to read it later tonight or tomorrow. :) Sorry if I haven't update my story because I was busily edit the prologue and the chapter 21 now so check the prologue when you have time. And chapter 23 will be up soon when I will be finish edit chapter 22 so be patient with me. Forgive me being make you wait so long. :(
7/27/2011 c19 7Pan's Grandaughter
I knew it! Haha! I knew it!
Great chapter! Don't have much to say except that! Update soon!
7Pan's GrandaughterI knew it! Haha! I knew it!
Great chapter! Don't have much to say except that! Update soon!
7/27/2011 c19 the.sky.angel
HEHEHHEHE!1 OMG! SHES PREGNANT! OMG! ok im done... ooooooo... i really dont want desmond,to DIE! hes my fav babe. ... if he does die he sould be named after his dad! HAHAHA. that would be kool but very ... sad.
LOVE IT!
HEHEHHEHE!1 OMG! SHES PREGNANT! OMG! ok im done... ooooooo... i really dont want desmond,to DIE! hes my fav babe. ... if he does die he sould be named after his dad! HAHAHA. that would be kool but very ... sad.
LOVE IT!
7/27/2011 c19 RonieLove
wow... a pregnancy! cant say i didnt see this coming but i never really thought tht it would. nicely done and please keep writting. im just cant wait to find out wht dads going to say, especially after "yur part of the family" lol
wow... a pregnancy! cant say i didnt see this coming but i never really thought tht it would. nicely done and please keep writting. im just cant wait to find out wht dads going to say, especially after "yur part of the family" lol
7/26/2011 c19 1Aria Senora
"I can't believe what I'm hearing! My own boyfriend is siding with my Dad?"
'Dad' should be lowercased because she's refering to him as a basic noun/family member, not a name.
It would be capitalized if it was like this:
"I can't believe what I'm hearing! My own boyfriend is siding with Dad?"
She's not using 'dad' as a name, so it should be lowercased.
1Aria Senora"I can't believe what I'm hearing! My own boyfriend is siding with my Dad?"
'Dad' should be lowercased because she's refering to him as a basic noun/family member, not a name.
It would be capitalized if it was like this:
"I can't believe what I'm hearing! My own boyfriend is siding with Dad?"
She's not using 'dad' as a name, so it should be lowercased.
7/26/2011 c19 5TheRiverRunsDeep
I am scared he will die and not see the baby, believe it or not that thought makes me cry...Literally, because if Desmond dues i will cry...)':
5TheRiverRunsDeepI am scared he will die and not see the baby, believe it or not that thought makes me cry...Literally, because if Desmond dues i will cry...)':
7/26/2011 c19 27Princess97
That was epic! And this all had to happen just as Mr.Evans was starting loosen up on Desmond. Aww... I feel bad for him. I hope the child has his looks though :)
27Princess97That was epic! And this all had to happen just as Mr.Evans was starting loosen up on Desmond. Aww... I feel bad for him. I hope the child has his looks though :)
7/26/2011 c19 13angellover254
Wow! long chapter indeed:]
I was right! She was was pregnant, but I kinda feel bad for Desmond now...the child due date is also his 'suppose death' death:[ I just really hope something good happens and he lives! Now let see how their parents will react to this! Can't wait until you update again:]
13angellover254Wow! long chapter indeed:]
I was right! She was was pregnant, but I kinda feel bad for Desmond now...the child due date is also his 'suppose death' death:[ I just really hope something good happens and he lives! Now let see how their parents will react to this! Can't wait until you update again:]
7/26/2011 c18 angellover254
Dang it! I didn't know you updated two chapters already!
Oh well...anyways this chapter, remembered me of science in 9th grade lol, were we had to cut open the pig...it was disgusting! Reading this chapter, made me feel bad for the cat, and made me remember the awful smell...:/
Wow Desmond can get pretty jealous when he wants too! Lol...going to read the next chapter now!
Dang it! I didn't know you updated two chapters already!
Oh well...anyways this chapter, remembered me of science in 9th grade lol, were we had to cut open the pig...it was disgusting! Reading this chapter, made me feel bad for the cat, and made me remember the awful smell...:/
Wow Desmond can get pretty jealous when he wants too! Lol...going to read the next chapter now!
7/26/2011 c19 2Twistedin2Delusions
I think it's pretty sweet that she's pregnant. It's like his final stamp on the world, ya know? Its like his way of saying "yeah Desmond did in fact exist and here's my way of showing it." I think it will look like a complete replica of him even if it is a girl (which I am secretly hoping it is!).
;)
2Twistedin2DelusionsI think it's pretty sweet that she's pregnant. It's like his final stamp on the world, ya know? Its like his way of saying "yeah Desmond did in fact exist and here's my way of showing it." I think it will look like a complete replica of him even if it is a girl (which I am secretly hoping it is!).
;)
7/26/2011 c19 Esperanza12
This nis so cute and sad at the same time. I thought that might happen... Anyway, it was really good. Please update soon!
This nis so cute and sad at the same time. I thought that might happen... Anyway, it was really good. Please update soon!