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3/7/2011 c1 4SeedSong
I cried. Tears poured down my face, noticeable to everyone in the room. Poor Desmond. He shouldn't listen to his doctor. I know I wouldn't if that were me. If all he has left is one year to live, then darn he's gonna live it!
3/7/2011 c1 3I'mTheSummerToYourWinter
Good first chapter, sad but that's to be expected as it's about cancer haha

Not gunna say it made me cry because the only time I've cried about something not directly related to me is when Heath Ledger died, coz he was an amazing actor haha, I dont even cry in sad films like the notebook or seven pounds

But more to the point, good start, I felt like it could do with longer descriptions of feeling, maybe in relation to their surroundings? Because I didn't get much of a feel to their hightened emotions or what the hospital was like which you could tie in both easily, but great job anyway :)
3/6/2011 c1 ChocolateSkittles3
This is so sad,new reader here :) and i LOVED the first story but make Desmond BETTER! OMG :'[
3/6/2011 c1 13angellover254
Awesome first chapter! I almost cried at the end, it's so sad! Please dont make him die, there has to be some way, just done make him die, or I would cry.
3/6/2011 c1 2Soonafter100
I can't believe he has cancer and I am so sad, knowing you you will do a amazing job in bring this story together, good luck and I will try to review as soon as I can.
3/6/2011 c1 Aamna
:'( This was so sad. I wonder what the nurses are hiding. I hope he doesnt't pass away early. GO MICHELLE! FIND A CURE! I hope you update soon. And I jope the old Desmond comes back :'(
3/6/2011 c1 LivinLyfe2TheFullest
omg my eyes were all teary when i read this ... and now im sniffling :'( :'(
3/6/2011 c1 2I-am-happy
I freaking loved it! Update soon amazing writer, you!
3/6/2011 c1 3Wordsmith49
YES! A sequel. I knew it would happen. I predict that he will live. He HAS to. Or I will explode.

~Wordsmith49~
3/5/2011 c1 1EpicGirl42
Ooh! I finished Guide For Guys a few days ago and I really like the beginning of this sequel! Keep it up! EpicGirl
3/5/2011 c1 broken-pixie
Again, so very, very sad. Great first chapter :) I'm so happy you got the sequel up so quick.
3/5/2011 c1 1Spring Jasmine Flower
WOW...the sequel sounded interesting! Okay! i need to make sure i don't cry! This is gonna be a sad ending! I can feel it...update soon! can't wait 2 see wat will happen next!
3/5/2011 c1 1Aria Senora
That was so good! Please write more!

Good luck! [=
3/5/2011 c1 MITCHIESHANELUVR124
wow! this is good! hope things get better 4 desmond!
3/5/2011 c1 1Hoor-al-Ayn
PLEASE don't make him die!

Pretty good. Add a scene at school about his cancer. Do the other kids know about it?
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