for Zero to Sixty8/27/2013 c5 
1Menn
AHHA, actually, the quick way Danny just knows to strike a pose and shoot is girly, but that is okay! xD
1MennAHHA, actually, the quick way Danny just knows to strike a pose and shoot is girly, but that is okay! xD
8/27/2013 c1 Menn
"Danny wished they'd fire her." - Instead of a comma, there should be a period before that sentence.
"changed his clothes and went to sleep." - It should be " changed his clothes, and went to sleep." (series of items needs a comma)
;) A no-one-can-makeout-with me premise, eh? I love the ironic and sort of contradictory/conflicting stories to begin with!
"Danny wished they'd fire her." - Instead of a comma, there should be a period before that sentence.
"changed his clothes and went to sleep." - It should be " changed his clothes, and went to sleep." (series of items needs a comma)
;) A no-one-can-makeout-with me premise, eh? I love the ironic and sort of contradictory/conflicting stories to begin with!
3/12/2013 c9 vcdwhite
the last chapter seemed hurried but i like how it ended. Can you write a sequel for this... like how they become more intimate with each other? oh and can you write about how they met and about their first sex... LOL...too many request... sorry. I just really love the characters :)
the last chapter seemed hurried but i like how it ended. Can you write a sequel for this... like how they become more intimate with each other? oh and can you write about how they met and about their first sex... LOL...too many request... sorry. I just really love the characters :)
11/17/2011 c9 Megan
You said Austin grabed the pitcher by her bed. LOVED IT! I am so sad it is over.
You said Austin grabed the pitcher by her bed. LOVED IT! I am so sad it is over.
11/17/2011 c8 Megan
I hope Austin and Danny get together. There is one mistake when Tyler said he would get leather pants; you said Danny was a girl when he laughed
I hope Austin and Danny get together. There is one mistake when Tyler said he would get leather pants; you said Danny was a girl when he laughed
11/17/2011 c7 Megan
Its so good!
Its so good!
11/17/2011 c6 Megan
The only problem I found was when Danny put his bike away you called him a girl. Can't wait to finish it!
The only problem I found was when Danny put his bike away you called him a girl. Can't wait to finish it!
11/16/2011 c5 Megan
I love it!:)
I love it!:)
11/16/2011 c4 Megan
After Austin kissed Danny in his sleep at the end of the chapter he says herself it should be himself. I hope Austin and Danny get together!
After Austin kissed Danny in his sleep at the end of the chapter he says herself it should be himself. I hope Austin and Danny get together!
11/15/2011 c3 Megan
You called Danny a girl when Austin followed him in the kitchen. But other than that it is perfect can't wait to see what Austin dose!
You called Danny a girl when Austin followed him in the kitchen. But other than that it is perfect can't wait to see what Austin dose!
11/15/2011 c2 Megan
Can't wait till the end! I love this story.
Can't wait till the end! I love this story.