6/4/2011 c4 4TinySliceOfHeaven
oh my gosh, I really like this! :D It's really original - I've never seen a story like it before - and very well written. It has very good description; it's not overdone, or practically not there.

Your doing an amazing job with it so far, and I can't wait for the next chapter! :D

So if it's not to late, can I OC? :)

Name: Ansley Heart

age: 15

height: 5"1

approx. weight: 100 lbs

body: Ansley has thick, really light blonde hair (you know that color that little kids have), that goes down to her lower back. She is pretty skinny, but fairly curvey, and her build can be described as elfin - athletic. She has big, blue eyes and one of those very feminen faces; she is always thought to be younger than she really is.

special ability (like superpower): tellaportation

skills: photographic memory,

Also, she's very good at looking innocent, if that makes any sense; she can always distract people with her almost childish looks. (like you know, adults would coo over her? :) )

weaknesses: she hates being shouted at. Loves food too much (except for vegys; she hates those), is too oblivious and not the smartest person around

personality: Ansley is very random, loud, and childish. She tries to be nice to everyone, and you either love or hate her. She's overly bubbly, always smiling; that type of person. She's the type of person that will adopt you as her big sibling if she likes you enough. ^.^

history: Ansley grew up with a drunk for a father, and her mother walked out on them when she was still a baby. She grew up having to fend for herself and practically take care of her father. When she was ten, her father started abusing her and.. you know, hurting her. When she turned 14, she decided she didn't want to live like that anymore and ran away. So she could live, she learned how to pick pockett, or distracted people by her looks and assumed innocence (and then she would steal there wallets).

family: she has no siblings, she doesn't know who her mother is, and her father..

David Heart: 49; 5"7, 140 pounds, brown hair, brown eyes, stout build..

likes: swimming, being cheerful, people cooing over her

dislikes: abusers, tall people (they look scary to her), large crowds

thoughts on first being asked to join HALO: "Yay! Of course I'll join!"

(yes, she's oblivious and kind of.. not the smartest)

type of boy she's interested in: OK. You know those guys on animes that look really girly?

Yeah. Those. xD

music likes: Justin Bieber, Miley Cyrus, Selena Gomez, Jonas Brothers..

clothing style: she always has to be wearing something pink. She likes skirts, dresses, things like that. All her clothes are very modest, though.

favorite colors: pink and blue

fav. Food: icecream, anything sugary

current town: Trenton, New Jersey (that's the hometown also)

Oh, by the way? I swear to go I'm not like that, I just love the oblivious, cutesy-type chicks. there sooo cute! 3

(and not in the creepy way) xD

5/26/2011 c4 I am Alice of Human Sacrifice
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4/14/2011 c3 uniquely-unique
Cinnamon would be such an awesome name to have... it makes me think of hot chocolate. Yum! Hot chocolate...

Anyways this story is complete awesomeness. I mean come on! Teenage girls that kick evil in the butt? It's bound to be a winner.

So update soon and all that good stuff!

☺uniquely-unique☻

3/20/2011 c3 Hazeljv
Vlad scares me... O.O Not gonna lie. Nice to see an OC, Betrayal looks very interesting. ^_^

3/16/2011 c2 NONEXISTENT ACCOUNT
Sophie Ann Walker

age- 16

height- 5'4

weight- 130 (i'm not good wtih guessing weight)

Appearance- Green hawk-like eyes with hints of hazel, skin that's poreclain color, slim but sturdy build. Shoulder length straight whitish blonde hair with layered side bangs. No freckles.

superpower-mimicry of animals(people too if you want) and precognition( knowing an event before it happens)

weaknesses- (your choice) fear of heights perhaps?

personality-open minded, driven, relies on reason rather than feeling, social. Rarely gets into awkward situations. Can be unintentionally hilarious

history- Spent her life up to age 14 living in various foster care homes. At 12 she was adopted and lived with the Dulifgans for a happy 13 months. Then at their house on Ford Street a fire occured. Sophie fled the scene knowing that even though she wanted to save her family, she didn't have the power too. That family died. Her original family gave her up at birth being young and foolish. They passed away a year later in a car crash.

adopted family-

Susan Dulifgan-mother. Funny, loving,advice giver... Medium length dark brown hair. green eyes. Poreclain skin. Freckles.

Jeff Dulifgan-father. The wise one, cook of the family... Short brown hair, blue eyes, tan skin.

Alice Dulifgan-sister. Sophie liked Alice the best out of the family. She has the most similar characteristics and personality. Just about identical minus the freckles and the thick brown hair. Alice had blonde highlights over her long brown hair. Her eyes were blue green. Her skin was also poreclain.

original family-

Drew Walker-father. dark brown short hair. Hazel eyes. more of a faded tan look.

Abby Wendow-mother. long blonde hair. green eyes. poreclain skin.

likes- researching, planning escape routes(out of habbit)

dislikes-tight spaces, animal abusers,

hobbies-photography

thoughts on first being asked to join HALO-shock, suspisicion, wonder. "is this a scam?"is it a death sentence? a trap?""a chance to start a new life?"

crushes-(you can choose)

type of boy she's interested in- bad boy?(im clueless on this part. you can choose.)

music likes-rock:paramore, fire flight, flyleaf,daughtry, bon jovi

clothing style-earth tones. jeans and shirt? (up to you)

favorite colors-forest green all the way. purple too.

fav food- steak, oreos, icecream sundae

current town:minneapolis, minnesota home town:carmel, indiana

3/7/2011 c1 Hazeljv
This sounds really interesting... Which may be because I like anything related to secret agents and crime... But who cares. ^_^ Good job!