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3/20/2011 c1 612simpleplan13
"Every time I looked in em,"... 'em

"Fireworks were just goin off in all directions in my heart,... goin'

"I'm mekin a promise right ere,".. did you mean makin'? Even if you meant for the e it should be mekin' and 'ere

I did like that last line because it was a surprise. The piece itself wasn't really great poetry. It lacked the descriptions and imagery. It read more like prose in poetry form. Unless you meant it as mockery of a typical crappy love poem in which case that was good.

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3/13/2011 c1 2strawberry-sunset194
I didn't get it, until the end.

Nice

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