for Just Switch5/22/2011 c4 Upinthewoods
I love the uncertainty of it so far, it keeps me wanting to read on. Every chapter seems to end with a mini cliffhanger which I like. Keep writing!
I love the uncertainty of it so far, it keeps me wanting to read on. Every chapter seems to end with a mini cliffhanger which I like. Keep writing!
4/14/2011 c13 Ashley4287
oh.em.goshness! i feel bad for nathan... poor guy. didn't do anything to deserve this :( update soon! :D
oh.em.goshness! i feel bad for nathan... poor guy. didn't do anything to deserve this :( update soon! :D
3/17/2011 c2 Pianolover2393
I really like this so far. Keep writing on it so I can read more please :). Keep up the good work!
I really like this so far. Keep writing on it so I can read more please :). Keep up the good work!
3/14/2011 c3 
6StargazerJu
Its me again.. ok 1)convocation in the fisrt line should probaly be "conversation". 2)"I think looks like a mouse" something is missing in that sentence. 3)"Everyone is silence and stunned" needs rephrasing. try "Everyone is stunned into silence" instead. 4)"cougar or dates guys older then her: then should actually be than. 5)"slightly pick hue cheeks"- did you perhaps mean "slightly pink hue cheeks"?
6StargazerJuIts me again.. ok 1)convocation in the fisrt line should probaly be "conversation". 2)"I think looks like a mouse" something is missing in that sentence. 3)"Everyone is silence and stunned" needs rephrasing. try "Everyone is stunned into silence" instead. 4)"cougar or dates guys older then her: then should actually be than. 5)"slightly pick hue cheeks"- did you perhaps mean "slightly pink hue cheeks"?
3/13/2011 c2 StargazerJu
Interesting start I think. 2 things though: "Nikki reapplying her second coat of mascara on"- The "on" isn't necessary and the sentence is better without it.
also "side by side next to her" is redundant. It should be either side by side or next to not both
Interesting start I think. 2 things though: "Nikki reapplying her second coat of mascara on"- The "on" isn't necessary and the sentence is better without it.
also "side by side next to her" is redundant. It should be either side by side or next to not both