4/4/2016 c1 2OdderThings
Love it, super interested already.

On an editing note, in the second to last line, it should be "Maybe you'll be less adverse to speaking later" - I HATE editing my own work and usually let my reviewers do it for me, so hopefully you don't mind the mention.

1/10/2016 c19 LoveDenied
I'm disgusted with Leonis for trading her off like that. Do the Renegades even have a plan for afterwards if they manage to kill the Queen? Who do they think will take the throne?

1/5/2016 c18 1Dark Cyborg
Hello.

Here:

Sadly this was one of those times, so Cypress was walking around the manor lethargically, a grim look plastered to("on" instead of "to") her face.

Cypress blinked and paused, listening for a moment, when no voices sounded she hurried over and peaked("peaked" in this context, is wrong. It should be "peeked.") around the doorway, eyeing the man who was leaned over a desk, shuffling through some papers.

Did this really have to happen again? What was it about this horrid man that got her some(what even is "some" doing here?) uncomfortably excited?

Wulfe nodded curtly, "Didn't you know?"
(The comma indicates continuity of the statement, so it's supposed to be: Wulfe nodded curtly, "didn't you know?" You've made this kind of mistake several times, throughout the story.)

There's other pretty nit-picky things on, but I suppose those are for a beta-reader to fix...

Otherwise, I was hooked by the storyline, strung by the plot, tangled in the escalation of pace. You're skilled, with a great imagination. You just need to improve your expression of that imagination.

The things I love about this story would be:

The protagonist, I've always been up for redheads, with snarky, badass attitudes. Her name is beautiful too, Cypress. Lovely!

The lover, Wulfe. Just like his name, he is predatory. And he knows how to get his fiesty belle all riled up. You've done a great job with his character, persona, and physical description.

The setting, medieval and Ye-Olde-Places feel of this story is very appealing to me. Great job on weaving that theme.

Keep writing!
DC

1/11/2015 c16 PoshKimberlee
Yes! finally a update , I hope you continue to spoil me with them️

9/7/2014 c15 4The Phoenix Girl
Yay an update :D thank you! I really enjoyed reading the new chapter :D

9/6/2014 c15 story
Killing her friends is a sure fire way to make her hate him. He's on the side of an evil ruler who is suppressing her subjects. He's on the wrong side...why?...he knows it too, is it for wealth? fame?

6/6/2014 c10 4Red Cerberean Sanguine
Romance is usually not my cup of tea, though I liked your writing style in the beginning and how you could describe a vivid, fantasy type of story without over-doing it. Of course there were still times with the foreplay where I was rolling my eyes and thinking, "Okay, come on..." I like more of a Jane Eyre romance, something with a lesson, deep meaning, or moral to it, I wanted to see more of Cypress weighing her dignity and assessing the situation realistically. I liked how in prior chapters you kept a handle on these aspects: what was going on inside your characters, between them, and outside them. You started losing focus on the outside them part, as before we see Cypress remark on how Wulfe is being delusional and the whole disorder of the circumstance is clear, now it seems she's caught up in herself and sliding between accepting Wulfe and rejecting him. Maybe you meant to cease the reflecting comments on their relationship realistically? I like a realistic, brutal touch, it sets you apart from the generic Twilight-ish Fifty Shades of Gray-ish types of romances, and it seems you dropped it at this point. Perhaps you like the generic style, but I miss what you had before.

And the cross? Ehhhhh... I thought it was such a cliché and out of place. I wasn't getting any meaning from it, it was an annoying third-wheeler detail. No cliché's please!