for Shadows3/17/2011 c1 
20The Wandering Musician
Good poem! I love the short stanza especially-"The night begins a lullaby/ of wind and hushed whispers/ and she sleeps at last." It almost feels like a poem in itself. I thought that the line "than the moon ever ever could" would be strengthened if you left out the second "ever". Other than that, great job!
20The Wandering MusicianGood poem! I love the short stanza especially-"The night begins a lullaby/ of wind and hushed whispers/ and she sleeps at last." It almost feels like a poem in itself. I thought that the line "than the moon ever ever could" would be strengthened if you left out the second "ever". Other than that, great job!
3/16/2011 c1 3eucalyptus
i appreciate the personification of the dark, and the structure in which you break between the dark creeping, and the lullaby. not too shabby
3eucalyptusi appreciate the personification of the dark, and the structure in which you break between the dark creeping, and the lullaby. not too shabby