7/16/2011 c1 70Reel Wander
Family can do that to you, love them, yet, they are the source of your pain

their action/decisions not only affect them, but affect people around them

3/19/2011 c1 612simpleplan13
I like this. The combination of emotions in here is really great.

I didn't like the rhyming so much. A lot of it sounded forced and safe/made doesn't really seem to rhyme well at all.

I also like how it could apply to different situations with different people you might love. Nice job.

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3/17/2011 c1 287Archia
The rhyme in this is really well down so the whole poem flows really well. I like the simpleness of this, but then, the rhyme makes it mroe complicated.