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10/30/2011 c1 Zaffre Magpie
I like how many people can have a point of view about this when the true meaning is secret to the author. I do think it could flow a little better, though. But i did really like it. ;)
7/16/2011 c1 70Reel Wander
To see the true self,

Lost without the family and love ones,

Self righteousness only darkens the soul

Only with God, is there true Righteousness
4/16/2011 c1 989East-0f-Eden
I didn't like the format. But, I liked the poem. Does that make sense?
3/26/2011 c1 EvilEmoElmoKillsSanta
This is really good. I like it.
3/23/2011 c1 15Ice Bubble
This poem was very sweet and gave me something to think about - other than loads of homework and tons of tests to study for.

I'm not sure though, that I quite get the fourth stanza:

The combination would bring

Poor restless souls to find

Lost hearts among abandoned lives.
3/18/2011 c1 this wild abyss
I liked how this was open to interpretation even as it had a specific purpose known only to the author. It gave the piece a more accessible feel. I did think at times your phrasing was a bit awkward and could have been improved on because of the interruption of flow and pace.

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