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3/19/2011 c1 1JemuaL
This seems to be rather interesting. Just put some deeper description of the characters so I can fully understand the scenarios.

Also, your writing style is really exemplary though you just have to look out for the tenses. Everything seems fantastic. Can't wait for your next chapter. Keep up the good work

-JemuaL
3/19/2011 c1 12Dahmun
So far it's an odd beginning, it's not bad, it's actually interesting. I feel for Em, being blamed for her best friends death. I totally believe her as of now! Hah.

Good story so far, I'll be waiting to read some more. Also, you should put comma's and periods after your dialogue too. It'll make it run and look smoother.

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