for Vision of Love6/3/2011 c11 
1bbystace
Im sorry I dont mean to be rude but I dont understand this story at all. Is it like every other chapter was the past or what cause one day she's with jacob and the next she's with taylor and Im oh so very confused some chapter's I like like the one's with her mom's boyfriend becuase their suspensefull and they leave me guessing and I kinda like the chapter's with jacob It's just that the rest confuses me... Again I hope this wasnt offensive I'd just like to get a better understanding of the story cause really do kinda like it, It's just that it confuses me :)
1bbystaceIm sorry I dont mean to be rude but I dont understand this story at all. Is it like every other chapter was the past or what cause one day she's with jacob and the next she's with taylor and Im oh so very confused some chapter's I like like the one's with her mom's boyfriend becuase their suspensefull and they leave me guessing and I kinda like the chapter's with jacob It's just that the rest confuses me... Again I hope this wasnt offensive I'd just like to get a better understanding of the story cause really do kinda like it, It's just that it confuses me :)
6/3/2011 c9 Vici Daily
Great story! I really feel for Jordan - trying to protect all of her sisters while away at college most of the time is hard. Hopefully they get rid of Richard! :)
Great story! I really feel for Jordan - trying to protect all of her sisters while away at college most of the time is hard. Hopefully they get rid of Richard! :)
5/26/2011 c1 1Charmedmiss
I really enjoyed the first chapter! You are very good at describing people, scenes, emotions, everything. I like the attention to small details. Excited to see where this story goes!
1CharmedmissI really enjoyed the first chapter! You are very good at describing people, scenes, emotions, everything. I like the attention to small details. Excited to see where this story goes!
5/25/2011 c1 18Eve's Apples
The fact that it mentions porn stars and other adult things should make it either a T or M rating. K+ Is for little kids :O. Other than that I really like this, keep going XD
18Eve's ApplesThe fact that it mentions porn stars and other adult things should make it either a T or M rating. K+ Is for little kids :O. Other than that I really like this, keep going XD
4/7/2011 c1 6JustAnotherNewbie
Wow. Really great first chapter.
The line "Calm down, she told her erratic heart." is amazing. It was so easy to relate to. Your brain knows you can't have him but your heart doesn't listen. Very cute :)
Hopefully you'll write another chapter soon!
6JustAnotherNewbieWow. Really great first chapter.
The line "Calm down, she told her erratic heart." is amazing. It was so easy to relate to. Your brain knows you can't have him but your heart doesn't listen. Very cute :)
Hopefully you'll write another chapter soon!
3/31/2011 c1 conleyswifey
very well written. i always like a story where the man is the weak one... it shows another side to men that isnt' often shown because they are always potrayed as being calm, confidnet and fearless. Good job
very well written. i always like a story where the man is the weak one... it shows another side to men that isnt' often shown because they are always potrayed as being calm, confidnet and fearless. Good job
3/21/2011 c1 21diverse enigma
All I can really say is that this is beautiful! I was so into it, I couldn't stop reading it. But it just ends with such sadness. Keep up the good work, hope to hear more of your stories soon!
21diverse enigmaAll I can really say is that this is beautiful! I was so into it, I couldn't stop reading it. But it just ends with such sadness. Keep up the good work, hope to hear more of your stories soon!
3/20/2011 c1 7SophieInPink
Wow, this is so bittersweet. I feel sad after reading this, but I guess that's good since it means you accomplished your goal as an author! Great work.
If you have time, feel free to check out my story Scandalous? I would definitely value your opinion.
Anyway, keep it up! I can't wait to find out more.
Soph xx
7SophieInPinkWow, this is so bittersweet. I feel sad after reading this, but I guess that's good since it means you accomplished your goal as an author! Great work.
If you have time, feel free to check out my story Scandalous? I would definitely value your opinion.
Anyway, keep it up! I can't wait to find out more.
Soph xx