for Belle of the Masquerade3/30/2011 c1 
1StoryMonster
Very good idea!
You seem to have a penchant for unusual writing, and this one was very interesting.
I liked the beginning, and I thought that you introduced it very well, about her love for masks.
But later on, the part where she stopped wearing masks and stuff? Kinda unclear You could have described it a bit more, so as to explain.
You could have framed the questions (why, how, etc.) differently, it was becoming redundant.
But great try, and very interesting.:)
StoryMonster
PS. Could you please repay this via Yours Truly an Indian Pessimist? Thanks!
1StoryMonsterVery good idea!
You seem to have a penchant for unusual writing, and this one was very interesting.
I liked the beginning, and I thought that you introduced it very well, about her love for masks.
But later on, the part where she stopped wearing masks and stuff? Kinda unclear You could have described it a bit more, so as to explain.
You could have framed the questions (why, how, etc.) differently, it was becoming redundant.
But great try, and very interesting.:)
StoryMonster
PS. Could you please repay this via Yours Truly an Indian Pessimist? Thanks!
3/26/2011 c1 28Michael Kelso
I was drawn in but wasn't sure where you were going with this. I liked the masks. You described them very well. The image of vanity came across good. All in all, a very good short story. Well done.
28Michael KelsoI was drawn in but wasn't sure where you were going with this. I liked the masks. You described them very well. The image of vanity came across good. All in all, a very good short story. Well done.
3/22/2011 c1 7Fedorachild
I really liked this. We all wear masks, and it's like that quote:
"We all wear masks, and the time comes when we cannot remove them without removing some of our own skin."
But yeah. Well done, I liked a lot of the language you used :)
7FedorachildI really liked this. We all wear masks, and it's like that quote:
"We all wear masks, and the time comes when we cannot remove them without removing some of our own skin."
But yeah. Well done, I liked a lot of the language you used :)
3/22/2011 c1 81knownkonvict
beautiful. i loved how you contrasted the two seperate masks and overall explained what they symbolized
81knownkonvictbeautiful. i loved how you contrasted the two seperate masks and overall explained what they symbolized