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2/18/2013 c14 mylittlePRINCESS
keep writing:)
4/26/2012 c6 JD Fly
I read Ch 1 of a lot of stories, Ch 2 of some, & Ch 3 of very few, but I'm still with you. Her thought, 'Who are you & what have you done with Dillon?' made me laugh. I like to laugh. I also like the way u kept her ID a mystery. Unfortunately, I have to turn u off & get to work on 'The Tutor,' but I'll be back to finish ur story.

JD Fly
2/9/2012 c13 mylittlePRINCESS
next chapter please.
2/5/2012 c13 mia aurora
yes ! new chapter ! oh I hope Nathaniel die soon :}
12/31/2011 c12 2Daddy's Little Peach
Kia ora!

I must say, I'm pretty stoked I found your story on here this morning. It's not going to change the world, but it's nice to find something that isn't about high school, bets, werewolves, vampires, or some combination of the above!

- I like the names you've chosen for your characters; not generic, but not so weirdly OTT that they just sound ridiculous. I hate trying to relate to people who sound like they should be staring in a bad porno film.

- Sometimes your tense changes a little bit. It's not major, but just something to keep an eye on.

- I know I've kind of mentioned this, but I really like the fact that they're adults rather than teenagers. I'm only 21 myself, but I feel I can relate to them better as adults. Plus, It makes it that much more real to find that your old bullies have changed 10 years down the track, as opposed to just a few weeks.

- Also your spelling slips every now and then, like using 'principle' when it should be 'principal' - maybe just give your chapters one last read over before posting, to weed out the little errors, or get a beta reader.

- I admire your portrayal of the kids. I read so many stories where four and five year olds seem to have been fed dictionaries for breakfast, but the children here use basic language in a way that I see in real-life kids their age, so well done!

- I felt the kidnapping plot-thread came on a little bit soon. It seemed like we learned about Abby's tight security and then BAM, the kids are gone. I think another chapter in between would be more effective in lulling the reader into a false sense of security, but that's my opinion - I'm no professional editor lol.

- Hansen is TOTALLY dirty, isn't he? The weird questions, the fact the warrant is taking longer than it should...I smell me some rat bacon!

Sorry this was son intensely long, but I hate getting reviews that consist of 'OMG, Dillon is totally sexci, I luv you're storii!1one', so I try and avoid giving such reviews.

Mish xx
7/30/2011 c12 2heytherehoyhoy
Another good chapter! Keep it up!

Yay! I reviewed!
7/30/2011 c12 3Floppy125
Please please please update ASAP! I can't wait to read the next chapter! And I'm eager to see Dillon and her together! Or at least some romance-related scenes!

PLEASE UPDATE ASAP =)
7/30/2011 c12 5U MadeMyLifeComplete
Ah such a cliff hanger though im glad you updated I was half thinking you had gone off the planet :) anyhow great chapter and im glad there all happy now and she is hopefully going to tell them :) cant wait for the update hopefully I will see you round soon :)
7/29/2011 c12 2I-am-happy
So you had to end it there? Huh? HUH? Mean! Oh well, the chapter itself makes up for it :D I really liked this one! It was... I don't know, calming? If that's the right word. It just set me at ease and made me pumped for the next chapter! I can't wait! But you must promise me this time you will give me the next chapter WAY faster? Please?

Smile,

Emily
7/29/2011 c9 Debbie Lynn
I love this story, but I don't think that Dillion would come back into the story after thirteen years. My email address is .
6/8/2011 c11 glitter-whisper
hey marzmez.

thanks for updating. :)

um, best wishes to your personal life. i hope things gets better.

can u send me the first excerpt frm dilliomn's pov.. i havent read any. :/
6/7/2011 c11 3Floppy125
I love how she takes care of her kids :) Although I did want to see more of Dillon, but I guess I'll have to wait...

Anyways... I want another excerpt! hahah (The last one i got was the one where dillon talks to his friend about Abby- after the interview..)

Please update ASAP! Love the story!
6/7/2011 c11 mylittlePRINCESS
i was reading your story and its AWESOME update more please
6/6/2011 c11 2CaBlasch87
wow, great story!
5/24/2011 c10 2I-am-happy
Ohh! Really good chapter! I'm happy she found them. but I really want that jerk to die! You did a very good job! Well done!

Emily
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