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3/25/2011 c1 20The Wandering Musician
The images in this poem are beautiful, but the meter was a little rough. I felt like you were going for a very rhythmic, rhyming poem, but I couldn't find a good rhythm when I read it. You should probably decide whether or not you want lots of rhythm and then restrict yourself to a small range of syllables per line if you do (for example, only have lines of 10-12 syllables). Anyway, wonderful job! It's a nice poem.

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