for Enlighten Me4/2/2011 c5 
6MilanJohns
Nice chapter, and about caleb- I still don't have an opinion about him maybe because there are not a lot of scenes with him and in the one's I read there is still only one side of him.
So I would wanna see more 'Carvy' scenes too..^^
6MilanJohnsNice chapter, and about caleb- I still don't have an opinion about him maybe because there are not a lot of scenes with him and in the one's I read there is still only one side of him.
So I would wanna see more 'Carvy' scenes too..^^
3/27/2011 c1 Erin Bear
I really like the idea of this story and the potential plot line. I haven't seen too many stories on this site about angels, so the plot hasn't been completely overdone yet.
Is Arvy her real name or a nickname? It's definitely a name that haven't seen anywhere before.
You have a very nice, easy-to-read writing style, and I didn't spot any typos or huge grammatical errors, so no complaints there.
Since this is the first chapter, I don't have anything very helpful to say yet, other than to really try to keep this story from becoming very predictable. Between your summary and the last line of this chapter, I think most readers, including myself, have already figured out what's going to happen in general.
I'm looking forward to reading the characterizations of Arvy and Caleb and their interactions. Good luck!
I really like the idea of this story and the potential plot line. I haven't seen too many stories on this site about angels, so the plot hasn't been completely overdone yet.
Is Arvy her real name or a nickname? It's definitely a name that haven't seen anywhere before.
You have a very nice, easy-to-read writing style, and I didn't spot any typos or huge grammatical errors, so no complaints there.
Since this is the first chapter, I don't have anything very helpful to say yet, other than to really try to keep this story from becoming very predictable. Between your summary and the last line of this chapter, I think most readers, including myself, have already figured out what's going to happen in general.
I'm looking forward to reading the characterizations of Arvy and Caleb and their interactions. Good luck!
3/27/2011 c1 Hale-Stormer
Sounds promosing! Can't wait to see where this leads. I love the part where her mom was like "You such an angel." It was perfect lol. Keep up the awesome writing. :)
-HS.
Sounds promosing! Can't wait to see where this leads. I love the part where her mom was like "You such an angel." It was perfect lol. Keep up the awesome writing. :)
-HS.