for I'm Ready For You11/15/2011 c5 Cutiecat
Please, please, please update! This is a really good story and I can't wait to find out what happens!
Please, please, please update! This is a really good story and I can't wait to find out what happens!
11/15/2011 c3 Cutiecat
Sorry, I forgot to review the first two chapters .; I'm really into this story. It's pretty good so far, so I'm gonna read more ^_^
Sorry, I forgot to review the first two chapters .; I'm really into this story. It's pretty good so far, so I'm gonna read more ^_^
4/14/2011 c3 
59builtonbones
I think that the dialogue and plot can be unrealistic but overall it's an intesting plot and I'm really compelled to see how it develops!
59builtonbonesI think that the dialogue and plot can be unrealistic but overall it's an intesting plot and I'm really compelled to see how it develops!
4/11/2011 c5 Lauren
Oh my. Amusing. I quite enjoy an jealous Daniel who doesn't know how to express his feelings except for being stupid, angry, and ridiculous. "No virgins upstairs"? Seriously?
Ok I have a slight problem with the word "chilliest". I don't know why, it just sounds of weird whenever I read it. Lol, anyway I'm glad you updated so fast, I don't know what to say for improvement but just be confident in your writing and enjoy the process. :) Good job
Oh my. Amusing. I quite enjoy an jealous Daniel who doesn't know how to express his feelings except for being stupid, angry, and ridiculous. "No virgins upstairs"? Seriously?
Ok I have a slight problem with the word "chilliest". I don't know why, it just sounds of weird whenever I read it. Lol, anyway I'm glad you updated so fast, I don't know what to say for improvement but just be confident in your writing and enjoy the process. :) Good job
4/10/2011 c4 Lauren
Great! An update! Well, it's definitely interesting... I can't wait to get find out what happens next with a turned on Daniel and a naked Emma... hahah. I don't know if I'm a 100% fan of Daniel though... he definitely is an intriguing character, but super rough on the edges. Like he acted ridiculous with his sister - swears and gets upset and annoyed too easily - seriously zero patience.. and was quite a wang about getting the girl to leave at the beginning.
But strange enough I still enjoy his character..soo ya. AHH can't wait to see Emma's reaction!
Great! An update! Well, it's definitely interesting... I can't wait to get find out what happens next with a turned on Daniel and a naked Emma... hahah. I don't know if I'm a 100% fan of Daniel though... he definitely is an intriguing character, but super rough on the edges. Like he acted ridiculous with his sister - swears and gets upset and annoyed too easily - seriously zero patience.. and was quite a wang about getting the girl to leave at the beginning.
But strange enough I still enjoy his character..soo ya. AHH can't wait to see Emma's reaction!
4/9/2011 c3 16dreamingwondering12
Interesting from the start. I got hooked on your story. Do update ASAP! ^^
16dreamingwondering12Interesting from the start. I got hooked on your story. Do update ASAP! ^^
4/9/2011 c3 Lauren
Wow, I really like it! I guess it's kind of a cliche but I find it refreshing... not sure why. And chapter 2 was awesome because I found Daniel's point of view really honest but unique (like he was really blunt about the way he saw the world and his opinion of girls). Great chemistry between him and Emma! Can't wait to see how their relationship might evolve!
Wow, I really like it! I guess it's kind of a cliche but I find it refreshing... not sure why. And chapter 2 was awesome because I found Daniel's point of view really honest but unique (like he was really blunt about the way he saw the world and his opinion of girls). Great chemistry between him and Emma! Can't wait to see how their relationship might evolve!
4/8/2011 c3 foxyricanlady
i like what you have so far but i would like a lttle more input on this josh guy
i like what you have so far but i would like a lttle more input on this josh guy
4/8/2011 c3 AbbeyXD
your story is going pretty good but please try to make the chapters longer! and update soon! :D
your story is going pretty good but please try to make the chapters longer! and update soon! :D
4/8/2011 c3 3aby pwn u
Wow, I know you need help and feedback but I don't have much to say! It was amazing! I LOVE the way you write! It's so interesting! Emma, wow. She is fabulous! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE HER! Her character is pretty cool and I love how she stays who she is when she interacts with Daniel. I mean, a little change us fine but unlike others, you had her "shake of the crazy feeling" instead of the "my heart picked up, i never realized how good he looked" kind of thing. Amazing job, already one of my most favorite stories! Take your time, quality takes time but try to hurry a tiny bit because I don't usually read incomplete stories and the anxiousness causes me t stop reading after a while. Every 3 weeks at least? Let me know, really excited for this story!
3aby pwn uWow, I know you need help and feedback but I don't have much to say! It was amazing! I LOVE the way you write! It's so interesting! Emma, wow. She is fabulous! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE HER! Her character is pretty cool and I love how she stays who she is when she interacts with Daniel. I mean, a little change us fine but unlike others, you had her "shake of the crazy feeling" instead of the "my heart picked up, i never realized how good he looked" kind of thing. Amazing job, already one of my most favorite stories! Take your time, quality takes time but try to hurry a tiny bit because I don't usually read incomplete stories and the anxiousness causes me t stop reading after a while. Every 3 weeks at least? Let me know, really excited for this story!
4/8/2011 c3 2hottie23
I like that last part about him staring at her, he wants her. Please update! I want to read what's next very soon!
2hottie23I like that last part about him staring at her, he wants her. Please update! I want to read what's next very soon!
4/8/2011 c2 hottie23
I'm really liking your story! I love how Emma thinks he's hot but she tells him she doesn't want him. Really good I can't for things to get heated between them, if they ever do and i really hope they do!
I'm really liking your story! I love how Emma thinks he's hot but she tells him she doesn't want him. Really good I can't for things to get heated between them, if they ever do and i really hope they do!
3/28/2011 c1 3aby pwn u
Haha, I like where this is going. Make sure you have it planned though. Most authors don't know where to go after their first meeting or when they "get together". Good luck!
3aby pwn uHaha, I like where this is going. Make sure you have it planned though. Most authors don't know where to go after their first meeting or when they "get together". Good luck!
3/27/2011 c1 Shelly
This is so good. When are you going to update soon? Please make the chapters longer. Do you have character pictures?
This is so good. When are you going to update soon? Please make the chapters longer. Do you have character pictures?