4/1/2011 c1 Punslinger
Excellent work. Well-written with powerful emotional impact without being overly obvious about it. I saw one small mistake: "They pushed me and daunted me..." That should be: "taunted me."
Excellent work. Well-written with powerful emotional impact without being overly obvious about it. I saw one small mistake: "They pushed me and daunted me..." That should be: "taunted me."