for Insecurity5/7/2011 c1 
460Time To Change
The imagery in the first 4 lines is really powerful: it's easy to relate to regrets and might have/did/shouldn't haves.
The last two lines seem very straightforward and simple in comparison, but the contrast and realism of the worry is perhaps a fitting end to the poem.
460Time To ChangeThe imagery in the first 4 lines is really powerful: it's easy to relate to regrets and might have/did/shouldn't haves.
The last two lines seem very straightforward and simple in comparison, but the contrast and realism of the worry is perhaps a fitting end to the poem.
4/10/2011 c1 8Adrenalin
I really liked the flow of your poem. It read easily, without any stop due to a word that didn't fit or anything. You managed to convey your idea very well in a few words, too.
If I was to say I don't like something, it would maybe be the two last lines. The level of language seems a bit behind the rest of the poem. There are really interesting images in the four first lines and, while the idea at the end is good too, it fells a little flat in comparison. But that's me being picky, because overall I really appreciated your poem.
8AdrenalinI really liked the flow of your poem. It read easily, without any stop due to a word that didn't fit or anything. You managed to convey your idea very well in a few words, too.
If I was to say I don't like something, it would maybe be the two last lines. The level of language seems a bit behind the rest of the poem. There are really interesting images in the four first lines and, while the idea at the end is good too, it fells a little flat in comparison. But that's me being picky, because overall I really appreciated your poem.