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7/29/2011 c1 7Orifiel M. Blancarte
The ending is a little bit rushed, but the body of the story has so much good content to it that I think you'll have to do only a little bit of tweaking to perfect the ending. But great job on this, it was an excellent read :)
4/14/2011 c1 Lara
I love this phobia!

Cute story, I live how hopes family were there and Matt. Haha though it is sad, in still found it somewhat amusing.

Nice one-shot
4/11/2011 c1 Best Friend
This is really good Ashley! I like the different slang you used. It's a lot different than the other stories you have written. The only thing I had a problem with was how short it was, but I know there was a limit on the contest you entered. I feel like if you use this and evolve it into a bigger story with more details it has a lot of potential. Also, I hate open endings like that. But that's just me haha. Once again, not your fault because of contest rules. Definitely expand the story :)

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