for This I Believe: He Took My Crayon!5/12/2011 c1 PJ Draft
The child I tutor brought a 'this I believe' essay prompt like this. :) since I'm clueless and wanted to see some examples and yours was one of the more recent and interesting pieces Fp search led me to. I like the idea of this, however, the repeating at the beginning was kind of off-putting, I'm curious if maybe it was a requirement when you wrote it or just an artistic choice. Anyways, just thought I should drop my thoughts since I read.
The child I tutor brought a 'this I believe' essay prompt like this. :) since I'm clueless and wanted to see some examples and yours was one of the more recent and interesting pieces Fp search led me to. I like the idea of this, however, the repeating at the beginning was kind of off-putting, I'm curious if maybe it was a requirement when you wrote it or just an artistic choice. Anyways, just thought I should drop my thoughts since I read.
5/7/2011 c1 
8Fira Dawnce
Wonderful. Mainly wonderful.
However, it would be good to not start almost every paragraph with "Have you ever..." It makes it kind of repetitive.
8Fira DawnceWonderful. Mainly wonderful.
However, it would be good to not start almost every paragraph with "Have you ever..." It makes it kind of repetitive.