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3Kyre Crow
Good job keeping the suspense. I can completely understand Christian. And it was a shock to me, as well, that the hunter was female. I agree with Christian; there's something fishy about the whole thing.
I like Christian - he trusts his instincts. He's an interesting character. All the mystery surrounding Joshua makes me want to learn more about him, but I've got to admit, I don't think he's very unique. At least, not yet. The story seems a little disconnected; that is to say, it seems a little chunky. Events seem to happen in little chunks, and it's hard to follow when things happen in the story. But that's my main critique. I like the small cast, and how all the characters have a lot of screen time. I just sort of skimmed it, since I didn't know which chapter I left off on. Good luck with the next chapter.
3Kyre CrowGood job keeping the suspense. I can completely understand Christian. And it was a shock to me, as well, that the hunter was female. I agree with Christian; there's something fishy about the whole thing.
I like Christian - he trusts his instincts. He's an interesting character. All the mystery surrounding Joshua makes me want to learn more about him, but I've got to admit, I don't think he's very unique. At least, not yet. The story seems a little disconnected; that is to say, it seems a little chunky. Events seem to happen in little chunks, and it's hard to follow when things happen in the story. But that's my main critique. I like the small cast, and how all the characters have a lot of screen time. I just sort of skimmed it, since I didn't know which chapter I left off on. Good luck with the next chapter.
8/19/2011 c5 Die In A Hole With Penguins
I just love this story so much! It's absolutely, deliciously addicting and very well written. I feel like this is one of those stories that have like 900 reviews and is mentioned a lot because it's so amazing. So it's strange that there is only 18 reviews.
I can't seem to think of a prompt for you which kinda bums me out but hopefully you can think of something. The only thing in my mine would be something about candy.
I just love this story so much! It's absolutely, deliciously addicting and very well written. I feel like this is one of those stories that have like 900 reviews and is mentioned a lot because it's so amazing. So it's strange that there is only 18 reviews.
I can't seem to think of a prompt for you which kinda bums me out but hopefully you can think of something. The only thing in my mine would be something about candy.
7/15/2011 c5 Dreams-Landing
I am loving this, the progression and how realistic it is in the way that Christian is reacting to everything. It is like a breath of fresh air to read some realism in vampire fanfiction.
You're doing an awesome job with this, and I cannot WAIT for more. ^_^
And let's see, a prompt? How about hallucinations, or poison?
OK, keep up the great work!
I am loving this, the progression and how realistic it is in the way that Christian is reacting to everything. It is like a breath of fresh air to read some realism in vampire fanfiction.
You're doing an awesome job with this, and I cannot WAIT for more. ^_^
And let's see, a prompt? How about hallucinations, or poison?
OK, keep up the great work!
7/4/2011 c1 Kyre Crow
I think that's a cool idea, starting each chapter with a prompt. This first chapter was intriguing; it really left me wondering how the vampire (right?) knows the main character, and why he wants his blood. Very interesting start; you started the action right away. I also think your vampire is different from other vampires I've read about: firstly, his biting hurts. Secondly, the sucking sound. Good job with keeping the suspense, and the fear, through the whole chapter.
I think that's a cool idea, starting each chapter with a prompt. This first chapter was intriguing; it really left me wondering how the vampire (right?) knows the main character, and why he wants his blood. Very interesting start; you started the action right away. I also think your vampire is different from other vampires I've read about: firstly, his biting hurts. Secondly, the sucking sound. Good job with keeping the suspense, and the fear, through the whole chapter.
7/2/2011 c5 5But A fRiend In The wOrld
Awesome chapter and you are keeping a steady story line. I love how the characters are reacting and pleeeeaaaassseee keep up the story updates
5But A fRiend In The wOrldAwesome chapter and you are keeping a steady story line. I love how the characters are reacting and pleeeeaaaassseee keep up the story updates
6/30/2011 c5 5Muffy the Dough Slayer
I like Joshua XD I don't know why, I just do. I also like the main character.
Sorry it took me so long to read...I was writing the next chapter of Never the Same :D But I'm done now and thus I had a chance.
I would leave a better review but I just woke up XD
At any rate, I am really enjoying this story. The chapters aren't too long, it's got a steady pace, and I love the characters, which is always a good thing :D
Keep up the great work!
...and I wonder who this "a friend" is...? Hmmm. Update so I can figure this out!
5Muffy the Dough SlayerI like Joshua XD I don't know why, I just do. I also like the main character.
Sorry it took me so long to read...I was writing the next chapter of Never the Same :D But I'm done now and thus I had a chance.
I would leave a better review but I just woke up XD
At any rate, I am really enjoying this story. The chapters aren't too long, it's got a steady pace, and I love the characters, which is always a good thing :D
Keep up the great work!
...and I wonder who this "a friend" is...? Hmmm. Update so I can figure this out!
6/22/2011 c2 Kuroneko
The part about blood loss is actually true, my younger sister lost half her blood count once and she felt horrible. Though her symptoms weren't as bad as his, though it might be because she lost her blood slowly while he lost his suddenly... Didn't give his body time to adjust.
The part about blood loss is actually true, my younger sister lost half her blood count once and she felt horrible. Though her symptoms weren't as bad as his, though it might be because she lost her blood slowly while he lost his suddenly... Didn't give his body time to adjust.
5/17/2011 c4 PeachesncreamluvsYaoi
I have no idea how you only have 12 reviews right now. Although, this story is only in the beginning stages it's very obvious to me that this story will end up being amazing. I already love Christian! He's so stubborn, but not stupidly so. Like, when Joshua told him not to cry for help. He didn't, right then, but he still did the smart thing and called the police in the morning, like a sane person who was afraid that some maniac had broken into their home. Now, I'm a huge yaoi/slash fan and can't wait for the real 'action'. So, work hard and I'll stalk you plenty. ; ) Good job! You've hooked me too!
P&C at the yaoi otaku forum.
I have no idea how you only have 12 reviews right now. Although, this story is only in the beginning stages it's very obvious to me that this story will end up being amazing. I already love Christian! He's so stubborn, but not stupidly so. Like, when Joshua told him not to cry for help. He didn't, right then, but he still did the smart thing and called the police in the morning, like a sane person who was afraid that some maniac had broken into their home. Now, I'm a huge yaoi/slash fan and can't wait for the real 'action'. So, work hard and I'll stalk you plenty. ; ) Good job! You've hooked me too!
P&C at the yaoi otaku forum.
5/16/2011 c3 5But A fRiend In The wOrld
Hey great story, but hint you do make chris soun a bit effeminat and to counter act this may I suggest you add a character for him to fall in love with. It can be a new girl in school, or someone he meets anywhere and just feels a sudden connection. Besides that the story is really good and holds strongly. Now time for me to sound like a typical fan and sayPLEASE HURRY UP ON THE NEXT FEW CHAPTERS. THEY ARE JUST TO INTERESTING TO STOP THINKING ABOUT. ALSO DO ME A FAVE AND READ MY STORY One Fallen Light
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5But A fRiend In The wOrldHey great story, but hint you do make chris soun a bit effeminat and to counter act this may I suggest you add a character for him to fall in love with. It can be a new girl in school, or someone he meets anywhere and just feels a sudden connection. Besides that the story is really good and holds strongly. Now time for me to sound like a typical fan and sayPLEASE HURRY UP ON THE NEXT FEW CHAPTERS. THEY ARE JUST TO INTERESTING TO STOP THINKING ABOUT. ALSO DO ME A FAVE AND READ MY STORY One Fallen Light
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Zachariah D. FullMoon
5/16/2011 c4 But A fRiend In The wOrld
GREAT GREAT GREAT GREAT GRETA
HURRY AND FINISH THE REST
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GREAT GREAT GREAT GREAT GRETA
HURRY AND FINISH THE REST
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5/16/2011 c4 5Muffy the Dough Slayer
Still loving it so far. I would leave a better review but my head is on fire right now...but I couldn't help but continue reading :D This is great so far, please update soon!
5Muffy the Dough SlayerStill loving it so far. I would leave a better review but my head is on fire right now...but I couldn't help but continue reading :D This is great so far, please update soon!
5/16/2011 c1 Muffy the Dough Slayer
Excellent start so far. I am fully intrigued to read on :D and thus that is what I am going to do! Onward!
Excellent start so far. I am fully intrigued to read on :D and thus that is what I am going to do! Onward!
5/15/2011 c3 2cateyedblue
Hey, I'm really addicted to your story! Loved the ending of Chapter 3 and looking forward to reading more soon. ;)
2cateyedblueHey, I'm really addicted to your story! Loved the ending of Chapter 3 and looking forward to reading more soon. ;)
5/12/2011 c3 3Stormyclouds
This is a pretty good fic so far. I like Laura, and I think it's awesome that you based her off your own mom. Update again soon! ^-^
3StormycloudsThis is a pretty good fic so far. I like Laura, and I think it's awesome that you based her off your own mom. Update again soon! ^-^