
5/9/2011 c1
2MysticDagger
THIS WAS THE MOST HILARIOUS THING I HAVE EVER EVER EVER READ! in my life! it deserves an OMG! and i was seriously rofl-ing and it wasnt even funny cuz u made me drop my ice cream all over me and i had to wash my clothes and everything but this is beautiful! it's hilarious! and u better continue it and not be like one of those authors that give up! i luved it! lol

THIS WAS THE MOST HILARIOUS THING I HAVE EVER EVER EVER READ! in my life! it deserves an OMG! and i was seriously rofl-ing and it wasnt even funny cuz u made me drop my ice cream all over me and i had to wash my clothes and everything but this is beautiful! it's hilarious! and u better continue it and not be like one of those authors that give up! i luved it! lol
5/9/2011 c1
1leavesfallingup
All she needed to make the day worse would be for the five o'clock news to show up and get it all on film. A very funny story. I could visualize the entire situation and it just kept going from bad to worse.

All she needed to make the day worse would be for the five o'clock news to show up and get it all on film. A very funny story. I could visualize the entire situation and it just kept going from bad to worse.
5/9/2011 c1
5Drops of Jewpiter
so far, your characters seem really realistic, and i think that's the most important thing for a story. continue please!

so far, your characters seem really realistic, and i think that's the most important thing for a story. continue please!
5/9/2011 c1
7Cenowar
Haha, this was quite brilliant. There were a few typo mistakes, but nothing a quick edit wouldn't catch I don't doubt, certainly nothing major. Everything seems pitch perfect - the characters, the situation, the build up to everything. It's a really good introduction to some really 3D characters and I'm really looking forward to reading more :)
~Roxie H.

Haha, this was quite brilliant. There were a few typo mistakes, but nothing a quick edit wouldn't catch I don't doubt, certainly nothing major. Everything seems pitch perfect - the characters, the situation, the build up to everything. It's a really good introduction to some really 3D characters and I'm really looking forward to reading more :)
~Roxie H.