for Son of the East Wind5/13/2004 c1 white lily
I really like this story, the character development is great, especially for Zoe, he remained strong, able and willing to pursue the love of his heart despite all the suffering he had been through, the one night thing with Patrick only made Zoe more believable, more endearing, it is very understandable after being rejected for so long, that he need some bit of love and comfort, and he once he realised his mistake, he immdiately took action to remedy it, and he never blamed Patrick for his own weakness, instead, their friendship flourished out of mutual kindness and caring. as for Eden, although his part was brief so far, but it was quite touching, torn between love of his family, envy and obsession, he finally made the right choice and I am so glad that he and Patrick found love in each together, it was just so sweet. Can we expect some more love scene for the two brothers and their respective lovers (blush)? and some more advantures? Will Zoe be able to have children with his lover (although I know mpreg is not everybody's cup of tea)? As the writer, you of course have the ultimate say in how the story will develop, as a reader, All I can ask for is that you please update soon. Thank you!
I really like this story, the character development is great, especially for Zoe, he remained strong, able and willing to pursue the love of his heart despite all the suffering he had been through, the one night thing with Patrick only made Zoe more believable, more endearing, it is very understandable after being rejected for so long, that he need some bit of love and comfort, and he once he realised his mistake, he immdiately took action to remedy it, and he never blamed Patrick for his own weakness, instead, their friendship flourished out of mutual kindness and caring. as for Eden, although his part was brief so far, but it was quite touching, torn between love of his family, envy and obsession, he finally made the right choice and I am so glad that he and Patrick found love in each together, it was just so sweet. Can we expect some more love scene for the two brothers and their respective lovers (blush)? and some more advantures? Will Zoe be able to have children with his lover (although I know mpreg is not everybody's cup of tea)? As the writer, you of course have the ultimate say in how the story will develop, as a reader, All I can ask for is that you please update soon. Thank you!
4/19/2004 c19 
2ViggorouslyInLove
Okay, I'm gonna do this now before I give into laziness I won't review.
I am half-way through this chapter, and DAMN YOU! *cries* I went through a terribly beautiful journey reading your story. Was about to give up reading when Zoe was first took into child slave thingy... erm, yeah, but after that painful reading, everything else got better... and better... and DAMN MICHEAL! How could he be so mean to little Zoe? Why? *cries some more* I mean, I mean... Zoe loved him! What more did he want, really?
But then, I couldn't read the part when Zoe took up Patrik's offer *glares at you* I was about to cry, and I couldn't go to sleep after knowing that Zoe... yeah. I was about to send some evil thing to you and make you rewrite that chapter, but damn it you're too good I couldn't!
Well, as if that wasn't enough, the perverted old man used Zoe again! Wha! WHY? Poor Zoe! What had he done to deserve it? NOTHING! Wha! I hate the Goddess! If he was her favorite, then why did she put him through all that s*! *cries*
But then this chapter makes up for everything. They're so cute together, Micheal and Zoe. Whaa! *blows nose* Micheal proposed! I'm so happy for both of them! I just hope nothing'll go wrong! Please don't let things go wrong! *shinning eyes, partly bc of tears*
Anyway, just want to let you know you did a very good job weaving your plot together. Very heartbreaking watching Zoe being determined to make Micheal admit his feelings to him and being pushed away everytime (though not without a kiss... mostly *guh*)
I was especially emotional when I was reading about Jazz dying and Carie watching her. They're twins, so that must mean their relationship is closer than normal siblings. Very nicely done. I think I liked Ivy, but thanks you for not writing about the scene where she died, otherwise I'd just break down completely.
I really like this, even though the main character did not lose his virginity to the guy he loved. I never review unless I feel very strongly about a story, which means everything about it has to be good - character developments, plot, writing style, genres, emotions, all that stuff. Congrats, I love your story, and shall continue to read after finishing this review.
I don't know if you'd noticed, but there are some minor spelling mistakes I saw throughout the stories. It's not much, but I thought you'd like to know about it and fix them, yeah? ^_^
Well, now, hurry and finish the story (with Micheal and Zoe living happily ever after with babies and flowers and fluffy pink hearts and sweet candies and ahem, yeah), and please DO NOT stop writing for years, DO YOU UNDERSTAND? Otherwise I'll come after you with something so horrible that you'll be working on the story nonstop! ^_~
Love you so much for writing this and sharing with us *smooches*
2ViggorouslyInLoveOkay, I'm gonna do this now before I give into laziness I won't review.
I am half-way through this chapter, and DAMN YOU! *cries* I went through a terribly beautiful journey reading your story. Was about to give up reading when Zoe was first took into child slave thingy... erm, yeah, but after that painful reading, everything else got better... and better... and DAMN MICHEAL! How could he be so mean to little Zoe? Why? *cries some more* I mean, I mean... Zoe loved him! What more did he want, really?
But then, I couldn't read the part when Zoe took up Patrik's offer *glares at you* I was about to cry, and I couldn't go to sleep after knowing that Zoe... yeah. I was about to send some evil thing to you and make you rewrite that chapter, but damn it you're too good I couldn't!
Well, as if that wasn't enough, the perverted old man used Zoe again! Wha! WHY? Poor Zoe! What had he done to deserve it? NOTHING! Wha! I hate the Goddess! If he was her favorite, then why did she put him through all that s*! *cries*
But then this chapter makes up for everything. They're so cute together, Micheal and Zoe. Whaa! *blows nose* Micheal proposed! I'm so happy for both of them! I just hope nothing'll go wrong! Please don't let things go wrong! *shinning eyes, partly bc of tears*
Anyway, just want to let you know you did a very good job weaving your plot together. Very heartbreaking watching Zoe being determined to make Micheal admit his feelings to him and being pushed away everytime (though not without a kiss... mostly *guh*)
I was especially emotional when I was reading about Jazz dying and Carie watching her. They're twins, so that must mean their relationship is closer than normal siblings. Very nicely done. I think I liked Ivy, but thanks you for not writing about the scene where she died, otherwise I'd just break down completely.
I really like this, even though the main character did not lose his virginity to the guy he loved. I never review unless I feel very strongly about a story, which means everything about it has to be good - character developments, plot, writing style, genres, emotions, all that stuff. Congrats, I love your story, and shall continue to read after finishing this review.
I don't know if you'd noticed, but there are some minor spelling mistakes I saw throughout the stories. It's not much, but I thought you'd like to know about it and fix them, yeah? ^_^
Well, now, hurry and finish the story (with Micheal and Zoe living happily ever after with babies and flowers and fluffy pink hearts and sweet candies and ahem, yeah), and please DO NOT stop writing for years, DO YOU UNDERSTAND? Otherwise I'll come after you with something so horrible that you'll be working on the story nonstop! ^_~
Love you so much for writing this and sharing with us *smooches*
4/18/2004 c21 6Wolfwitch
Wow. Just simply wow. That was nothing short of magnificent. I'm so glad I found it.
6WolfwitchWow. Just simply wow. That was nothing short of magnificent. I'm so glad I found it.
4/17/2004 c4 Appleofdeadfish554
wonderful story the charcters behave like true people. you need to watch you're spelling and captalization
wonderful story the charcters behave like true people. you need to watch you're spelling and captalization
4/15/2004 c1 1F. Teague
Ooh, int'resting beginning! Must read further to satiate curiosity... *mutters feverishly* Oh, and kudos to you for writing a slash story - you make fangirls like me absotively posolutely ecstatic ^_^
1F. TeagueOoh, int'resting beginning! Must read further to satiate curiosity... *mutters feverishly* Oh, and kudos to you for writing a slash story - you make fangirls like me absotively posolutely ecstatic ^_^
3/27/2004 c21 6LYK
This is an amazing story. The plot is well thought out, and the characters are wonderfully complex. I greatly look forward to the next chapter! ^^
6LYKThis is an amazing story. The plot is well thought out, and the characters are wonderfully complex. I greatly look forward to the next chapter! ^^
3/3/2004 c21 Rivana
Thanks for the story! Your plot was great. And the happy endings are in sight too. That always makes me so happy... *smiles extaticly*
Thanks for the story! Your plot was great. And the happy endings are in sight too. That always makes me so happy... *smiles extaticly*
2/18/2004 c21 Pheonix-17
That was so cool. Please finish it. I've been dying for the whole Micheal Zoe thing to happen for ages and I can't wait to see how the whole Eden issue will work out. Well done on writing such a intriguing and convincing story.
That was so cool. Please finish it. I've been dying for the whole Micheal Zoe thing to happen for ages and I can't wait to see how the whole Eden issue will work out. Well done on writing such a intriguing and convincing story.
2/17/2004 c21 frizzy
A fantastic fic. I've reviewed before, but not for a while. I just wanted to say that this fic is as good as any you can buy in the shops. It has action, adventure, magic, and romance all rolled into one. What more could a reader want?
You've developed your characters so well that they almost seem to be real people, and your world is as believable as the Harry Potter universe, which is not easy to achieve.
Congratulations on an excellent story, and I hope to read more in the future, particularly on Zoe’s and Micheal's relationship, which I have been eagerly awaited to occur since the very beginning. I also wait to see Eden and Patrik's relationship develop.
Update again as soon as you can, as I can't wait to read more
A fantastic fic. I've reviewed before, but not for a while. I just wanted to say that this fic is as good as any you can buy in the shops. It has action, adventure, magic, and romance all rolled into one. What more could a reader want?
You've developed your characters so well that they almost seem to be real people, and your world is as believable as the Harry Potter universe, which is not easy to achieve.
Congratulations on an excellent story, and I hope to read more in the future, particularly on Zoe’s and Micheal's relationship, which I have been eagerly awaited to occur since the very beginning. I also wait to see Eden and Patrik's relationship develop.
Update again as soon as you can, as I can't wait to read more
2/14/2004 c21 3Ebony Nemesis
AH! Please update soon...
This is too good! I'm so happy I stumbled across this fic...
And they're finally getting together, bout time as well! And they're pledged! And they'd better have sex soon(blushes)!
But what of Zoe and the stupid country(sorry, I don't mean it in anyway insulting, I find your twists very interesting actually)? And of Michael, and Eden... So you must update, please!
luv
Ebony Nemesis
3Ebony NemesisAH! Please update soon...
This is too good! I'm so happy I stumbled across this fic...
And they're finally getting together, bout time as well! And they're pledged! And they'd better have sex soon(blushes)!
But what of Zoe and the stupid country(sorry, I don't mean it in anyway insulting, I find your twists very interesting actually)? And of Michael, and Eden... So you must update, please!
luv
Ebony Nemesis
2/3/2004 c20 NightmareGryphon
This story is wonderful. It's amazing. The perfect mix of angst and yaoi. Poor Eden,though. That was so very sad. That almost made me cry. But I'm very glad with the fact that Treveden is dead. I hope you'll write a yaoi/lemon scene between Micheal and Zoe before the end.
This story is wonderful. It's amazing. The perfect mix of angst and yaoi. Poor Eden,though. That was so very sad. That almost made me cry. But I'm very glad with the fact that Treveden is dead. I hope you'll write a yaoi/lemon scene between Micheal and Zoe before the end.