for Son of the East Wind10/2/2003 c18 
8AikoShrek
NO NO NO NO NO! / Oh man, why did he agree? Micheal? DUH! Sorry but anything is better than Zoe being dead? What about Zoe being a personal sex toy to this Treveden piece of garbage? That's not better than being dead!
8AikoShrekNO NO NO NO NO! / Oh man, why did he agree? Micheal? DUH! Sorry but anything is better than Zoe being dead? What about Zoe being a personal sex toy to this Treveden piece of garbage? That's not better than being dead!
10/1/2003 c17 Jade
Woo hoo! I come back here and I find not one chapter but THREE more chapters! Yay! *gives Zoi three bags of marshmellows* When I was reading these chapters I was like "patrik needs to talk to michael. He'd probably knock some sense into him." and woo hoo! he does!
Now, I'll give you a bag of marshmellows AND a jar of marshmellow cream if you update soon. Hm?
Woo hoo! I come back here and I find not one chapter but THREE more chapters! Yay! *gives Zoi three bags of marshmellows* When I was reading these chapters I was like "patrik needs to talk to michael. He'd probably knock some sense into him." and woo hoo! he does!
Now, I'll give you a bag of marshmellows AND a jar of marshmellow cream if you update soon. Hm?
10/1/2003 c17 1esaure
Damn Author Alert didnt work. .
Anyho, go Ara! Go Ara! Go Ara! And Patrik too. Im so glad they talked or scared him senseless for Zoe. *Squees*
... ...*Ahem* Fangirlness aside, very nice chapter. When Jazz came back, which i didnt think she would, was quite emotional on my side.
Cant wait for more. ^-^
1esaureDamn Author Alert didnt work. .
Anyho, go Ara! Go Ara! Go Ara! And Patrik too. Im so glad they talked or scared him senseless for Zoe. *Squees*
... ...*Ahem* Fangirlness aside, very nice chapter. When Jazz came back, which i didnt think she would, was quite emotional on my side.
Cant wait for more. ^-^
9/26/2003 c17 31Quip Clip
Well...all I can say is, you have one hell of a story going here! I love the intricities of the plot!
One thing I have noticed, enough that it takes away slightly from the story, is the numbers of grammatical and spelling errors you have. I would suggest getting a beta, or at *least* going over it again, and spell-checking. There are many simple mistakes in there that are easily fixed, and the story would be much better without them.
On to better stuff! I love how you developed the characters to the point where we can sympathize/empathize with them, their personalities, and their situations. My favorite character is Patrik. I love how he's so human. Even though he knew his friend loved Zoe, he still did what felt good and isn't that what so many people do? But he confessed to it and is making amends, which is more than a lot of people do, and I like that he's redeeming himself. :D
Um...I think that's about it...I'll just be waiting on the update, so do it soon! ^_^
~*Gretchen*~
31Quip ClipWell...all I can say is, you have one hell of a story going here! I love the intricities of the plot!
One thing I have noticed, enough that it takes away slightly from the story, is the numbers of grammatical and spelling errors you have. I would suggest getting a beta, or at *least* going over it again, and spell-checking. There are many simple mistakes in there that are easily fixed, and the story would be much better without them.
On to better stuff! I love how you developed the characters to the point where we can sympathize/empathize with them, their personalities, and their situations. My favorite character is Patrik. I love how he's so human. Even though he knew his friend loved Zoe, he still did what felt good and isn't that what so many people do? But he confessed to it and is making amends, which is more than a lot of people do, and I like that he's redeeming himself. :D
Um...I think that's about it...I'll just be waiting on the update, so do it soon! ^_^
~*Gretchen*~
9/21/2003 c1 Ahborson
Oh i can hardly wait to here what happens next! Zoi you realy must finnish this soon and give me the updates!
Fantastic beging.
Oh i can hardly wait to here what happens next! Zoi you realy must finnish this soon and give me the updates!
Fantastic beging.
9/20/2003 c17 Yaoi no Hime
XD OMG~! I was just searching for yaoi fics and I discovered this one. I tell you; your fic doesn't have nearly as many reviews as it deserves! I love this fic to death, my favorite characters being Patrik and Ara Herself. Keep up the good work and I want to see another chapter soon~!
~*~Carin aka Rinnerz aka Yaoi no Hime~*~
XD OMG~! I was just searching for yaoi fics and I discovered this one. I tell you; your fic doesn't have nearly as many reviews as it deserves! I love this fic to death, my favorite characters being Patrik and Ara Herself. Keep up the good work and I want to see another chapter soon~!
~*~Carin aka Rinnerz aka Yaoi no Hime~*~
9/16/2003 c17 tokio
MORE~!
I really enjoyed the story so far. keep up the good work, Zoi. lovely~! i like Patrik (heart)
MORE~!
I really enjoyed the story so far. keep up the good work, Zoi. lovely~! i like Patrik (heart)
9/10/2003 c2 1IndianPhoenix
This is really quite well done. My only suggestion for you would be to make sure that you run spell check. Typos can be agonizing sometimes, mostly because they interrupt the flow of the speech so horribly. This is very, very well written. Keep up the good work.
1IndianPhoenixThis is really quite well done. My only suggestion for you would be to make sure that you run spell check. Typos can be agonizing sometimes, mostly because they interrupt the flow of the speech so horribly. This is very, very well written. Keep up the good work.
9/9/2003 c16 1esaure
Wow... ... didnt see that coming. Im surely impressed about it! It was like hitting a car ... ... only i didnt die or anything, lol. Anyho, Micheal still doesnt know but i suspect he will in a hella later chapter, cant wait for it. And it was so nice reading about eden and how zoe was like 'Im all kewl and collected and really dont care about being horrible killed so how ya been?'
Btw, was utterly surprised by Patrik too. He pisses me off. I always choose a good guy to hate ... ... but i dont wanna hate him! Hes so sexay! Ahh, bugger, guess its a luf/hate relationship then, always lufed those. ^-^
*huggles ficlet and plot bunnies* Cant wait for the next chapter!
1esaureWow... ... didnt see that coming. Im surely impressed about it! It was like hitting a car ... ... only i didnt die or anything, lol. Anyho, Micheal still doesnt know but i suspect he will in a hella later chapter, cant wait for it. And it was so nice reading about eden and how zoe was like 'Im all kewl and collected and really dont care about being horrible killed so how ya been?'
Btw, was utterly surprised by Patrik too. He pisses me off. I always choose a good guy to hate ... ... but i dont wanna hate him! Hes so sexay! Ahh, bugger, guess its a luf/hate relationship then, always lufed those. ^-^
*huggles ficlet and plot bunnies* Cant wait for the next chapter!
9/9/2003 c15 esaure
ah! The eviliness of it all. Oh god, what about micheal! That stupid git zoe! ... ... Not that i didnt read the porn... *Ahem* Anyways, back to my hysterics of the betrayal. The whole thing is bringing the angst on so well! Im almost crying bout what happen. how will Micheal take this? Ahh, im dying.*runs off to read next chapter*
ah! The eviliness of it all. Oh god, what about micheal! That stupid git zoe! ... ... Not that i didnt read the porn... *Ahem* Anyways, back to my hysterics of the betrayal. The whole thing is bringing the angst on so well! Im almost crying bout what happen. how will Micheal take this? Ahh, im dying.*runs off to read next chapter*
9/9/2003 c14 esaure
ahh, yes, virgin boys *chuckles* Got one myself. Anyho, utter professional, never thought of your writing juvenile before. Though, i guess i would to another professionals eyes but hey, im just a reader and i thought it was hella good, in the sense of 'cant look away'. ^-^
ahh, yes, virgin boys *chuckles* Got one myself. Anyho, utter professional, never thought of your writing juvenile before. Though, i guess i would to another professionals eyes but hey, im just a reader and i thought it was hella good, in the sense of 'cant look away'. ^-^
9/8/2003 c15 8AikoShrek
Oh, so absolutely wonderful in so many ways!
Good for Zoe, he had to do something before he exploded!
Patrik.. oh well, he didn't mind being used. ^^;
Micheal... wake up, dumbass, you just pushed Zoe into Patrik's bed, you retard!
What the hell just happened to Zoe? He's gonna be kidnapped?
Man... I love this story. ;_;
8AikoShrekOh, so absolutely wonderful in so many ways!
Good for Zoe, he had to do something before he exploded!
Patrik.. oh well, he didn't mind being used. ^^;
Micheal... wake up, dumbass, you just pushed Zoe into Patrik's bed, you retard!
What the hell just happened to Zoe? He's gonna be kidnapped?
Man... I love this story. ;_;
9/7/2003 c14 Jade
I love this story! Though I dont really like this whole new friendship with Patrik thing, maybe cause I never liked him really. And I never imagined him to be a sentinal *makes a face* But it makes it interesting. Which this story is. Very. I had to stop reading it in the middle of it, and my mind kept wandering to this story all day. Its that good. :)
If I give you a bag of marshmellows will you update soon? Hm? *waves bag of marshmellows in front of Zoi's face* What do you say?
I love this story! Though I dont really like this whole new friendship with Patrik thing, maybe cause I never liked him really. And I never imagined him to be a sentinal *makes a face* But it makes it interesting. Which this story is. Very. I had to stop reading it in the middle of it, and my mind kept wandering to this story all day. Its that good. :)
If I give you a bag of marshmellows will you update soon? Hm? *waves bag of marshmellows in front of Zoi's face* What do you say?