for Meet Me at the Altar10/22/2015 c1 arushy
I love the detail and specifications that you used! It's very well written.
I love the detail and specifications that you used! It's very well written.
7/19/2013 c8 drown in my desire
Why wouldn't engagement photo shoots go well?
I don't really feel like Liam and Nora have any chemistry...
Why wouldn't engagement photo shoots go well?
I don't really feel like Liam and Nora have any chemistry...
7/19/2013 c7 drown in my desire
I like Josh already :)
I'm choosing to believe that the subliminal message in Josh's words were - don't get married to Brooke!
I like Josh already :)
I'm choosing to believe that the subliminal message in Josh's words were - don't get married to Brooke!
7/19/2013 c6 drown in my desire
It's great that Nora wants her studio to be her own but if she wants a studio at all she should accept her dad's money. :P
It's great that Nora wants her studio to be her own but if she wants a studio at all she should accept her dad's money. :P
7/15/2013 c1 drown in my desire
Wow it's been a long time since I logged on to FP. And what a nice welcome I got! This story is full of promise. :)
Wow it's been a long time since I logged on to FP. And what a nice welcome I got! This story is full of promise. :)
5/8/2013 c8 
99Dreamers-Requiem
Again, I feel like a lot of this is too much telling and not enough showing. Nora at times doesn’t feel like a photographer; I’d think someone who takes pictures for a living would have a lot more attention to detail, and adding in something to her personality would make her come alive more to the reader. A lot of the descriptions are a bit vague, so maybe you could expand on them to give her more of a vibe.
[everyone wasn't always all smiles for engagement photo shoots, and most times it required a good amount of effort on both the photographer's part as well as the couple's to create that romantic atmosphere.] Why not? This might just be a personal thing, but I don’t get why a couple wouldn’t be happy with their engagement photos. Maybe you could expand on that a little?
Some of this felt a little rushed, and there doesn’t really feel like there’s any chemistry between Liam and Nora. I feel like there should be a bit more build up before he starts spilling his guts to her. I also feel like you’ve crammed a lot of his backstory in. Why is he suddenly telling Nora all of this? It makes him come across as a bit…weak. Especially in terms of Brooke. Makes him almost unlikable. I think you could spread it out a bit more, hint towards his feelings rather than have him state them so explicitly. And be careful with POV; you switch between Liam and Nora in points and it makes more sense to stick to Nora. As always, hope this helps.
99Dreamers-RequiemAgain, I feel like a lot of this is too much telling and not enough showing. Nora at times doesn’t feel like a photographer; I’d think someone who takes pictures for a living would have a lot more attention to detail, and adding in something to her personality would make her come alive more to the reader. A lot of the descriptions are a bit vague, so maybe you could expand on them to give her more of a vibe.
[everyone wasn't always all smiles for engagement photo shoots, and most times it required a good amount of effort on both the photographer's part as well as the couple's to create that romantic atmosphere.] Why not? This might just be a personal thing, but I don’t get why a couple wouldn’t be happy with their engagement photos. Maybe you could expand on that a little?
Some of this felt a little rushed, and there doesn’t really feel like there’s any chemistry between Liam and Nora. I feel like there should be a bit more build up before he starts spilling his guts to her. I also feel like you’ve crammed a lot of his backstory in. Why is he suddenly telling Nora all of this? It makes him come across as a bit…weak. Especially in terms of Brooke. Makes him almost unlikable. I think you could spread it out a bit more, hint towards his feelings rather than have him state them so explicitly. And be careful with POV; you switch between Liam and Nora in points and it makes more sense to stick to Nora. As always, hope this helps.
11/18/2012 c1 5Music.Sets.Me.Free
This is such a great story so far! It has a great hook and I am already interested! Nora seems like a great, realistic character and easy to relate to! I can't wait to read the next chapter! I hope you post more soon! This plot seems very unique and fun!
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5Music.Sets.Me.FreeThis is such a great story so far! It has a great hook and I am already interested! Nora seems like a great, realistic character and easy to relate to! I can't wait to read the next chapter! I hope you post more soon! This plot seems very unique and fun!
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