for Pinup Poster7/23/2012 c1 Latinoprincess
Firstly, this is an AWESOME story. Secondly, they are kinda short, and you should update more often. Otherwise, I dont have anything else left to say. Write more stories! :)
Firstly, this is an AWESOME story. Secondly, they are kinda short, and you should update more often. Otherwise, I dont have anything else left to say. Write more stories! :)
7/29/2011 c1 
13youngin-matomon
I think you should get rid of that last paragraph. Instead of that whole para ""Yeah. I'd really like that." I said smiling, my brown eyes brightening. I wanted to know more about Mathew and I wanted him to know more about me. God help me with this arrogant fool. It was funny how things turn out way different than you planned how you said or who you thought you'd go out with. Mathew wasn't the guy I dreamed of actually going out with, but here I am." You should finish it off with something short, just a sentence to finish it off perfectly you know? Something like: "I smiled. "I quite agree."" Finito! Or whatever, something similar.
Also you should give breaks. Otherwise its a teeny bit jumbled and rather annoying.
But, it was good story. Good writing, good scenes, a shmexy love interest.
Thanks for the read!
13youngin-matomonI think you should get rid of that last paragraph. Instead of that whole para ""Yeah. I'd really like that." I said smiling, my brown eyes brightening. I wanted to know more about Mathew and I wanted him to know more about me. God help me with this arrogant fool. It was funny how things turn out way different than you planned how you said or who you thought you'd go out with. Mathew wasn't the guy I dreamed of actually going out with, but here I am." You should finish it off with something short, just a sentence to finish it off perfectly you know? Something like: "I smiled. "I quite agree."" Finito! Or whatever, something similar.
Also you should give breaks. Otherwise its a teeny bit jumbled and rather annoying.
But, it was good story. Good writing, good scenes, a shmexy love interest.
Thanks for the read!
5/26/2011 c1 5My-Bloody-Sacrifice96
i really really like this :DD you should make it longer...it would make me happy :D
5My-Bloody-Sacrifice96i really really like this :DD you should make it longer...it would make me happy :D
5/22/2011 c1 JCqueen
REALLY REALLY REALLY GOOD! :) Funny and sweet... great mix I loved it! Keep up the great work!
3 JCqueen
REALLY REALLY REALLY GOOD! :) Funny and sweet... great mix I loved it! Keep up the great work!
3 JCqueen
5/21/2011 c1 Admins Pls Delete Me
You said that this wouldn't be very good...but it's GREAT! REALLY great! I like it, a lot! Sorry, I don't have any constructive criticism for you...
You said that this wouldn't be very good...but it's GREAT! REALLY great! I like it, a lot! Sorry, I don't have any constructive criticism for you...
5/21/2011 c1 4Pendleton
This was amazing, fantastic, absolutely wonderful. You had me laughing from the very start. It was incredibly relatable...I mean of course I have stalked my fair share of people and I end up falling out of trees all the time. Okay maybe not that, but her thought process was very human. Plus the ending was really cute. Overall I loved this.
4PendletonThis was amazing, fantastic, absolutely wonderful. You had me laughing from the very start. It was incredibly relatable...I mean of course I have stalked my fair share of people and I end up falling out of trees all the time. Okay maybe not that, but her thought process was very human. Plus the ending was really cute. Overall I loved this.
5/21/2011 c1 7squillink93
SEQUEL! i loved it :) it's quirky and cute! nice work :)
best wishes
squillink x
7squillink93SEQUEL! i loved it :) it's quirky and cute! nice work :)
best wishes
squillink x