for I Raised Them9/1/2011 c9 
15Katalina Tomas
Liked the connection to Irene. :) and :( at the same time, because it's saddening that natural disasters can wreck so much havoc. (not Irene specifically, I'm thinking of Japan right now) Anyways, loved it, as usual. I get that inspiration hits only every so often. :P Happens to me all the time.
15Katalina TomasLiked the connection to Irene. :) and :( at the same time, because it's saddening that natural disasters can wreck so much havoc. (not Irene specifically, I'm thinking of Japan right now) Anyways, loved it, as usual. I get that inspiration hits only every so often. :P Happens to me all the time.
8/1/2011 c8 7BipolarUnicornMonster
Hey, these stories do mean somthing to me. Just because I think we all have related with one or more of these charecters at one tim eor another. I think you do a pretty good job at catching the emotion, and thats good because without emotion; a story is just empty. I'm sorry for my last review; it was really short and had no substance, but now that I have more time I want you to know that these stories are really very good. and definitly worth adding on to. Like I said, you make it so easy to relate to the charecters, and I really like that. I feel small sometimes too, but when I do; I just look at the people around me and think about how much they would miss me if I were gone. So even if the world dosn't revolve around us, we still mater.
7BipolarUnicornMonsterHey, these stories do mean somthing to me. Just because I think we all have related with one or more of these charecters at one tim eor another. I think you do a pretty good job at catching the emotion, and thats good because without emotion; a story is just empty. I'm sorry for my last review; it was really short and had no substance, but now that I have more time I want you to know that these stories are really very good. and definitly worth adding on to. Like I said, you make it so easy to relate to the charecters, and I really like that. I feel small sometimes too, but when I do; I just look at the people around me and think about how much they would miss me if I were gone. So even if the world dosn't revolve around us, we still mater.
7/22/2011 c8 15Katalina Tomas
The last line really got to me. Now I feel insignificant in the scheme of things... thanks. Lol. :P
Anyways, it's really good, well written, as always.
Keep writing!
~Kat
15Katalina TomasThe last line really got to me. Now I feel insignificant in the scheme of things... thanks. Lol. :P
Anyways, it's really good, well written, as always.
Keep writing!
~Kat
7/22/2011 c8 5Jinebiebe
I've never read flash fiction before, so it's little hard for me to critique. I like this type of writing. Usually I hate present tense, but it works well in your stories. I don't believe that first person is a weakness because it works well with your stories. Flash fiction has almost a poetic feeling and I think all of your stories are very smooth and relatable. I have a challenge for you, write a story that isn't depressing. Depressing stories are easy to write because humans tend to be more sensitive to negative emotions, but I would like to see you write a story that is positive. Anyway, I like this flash fiction thing and look forward to reading more. :)
5JinebiebeI've never read flash fiction before, so it's little hard for me to critique. I like this type of writing. Usually I hate present tense, but it works well in your stories. I don't believe that first person is a weakness because it works well with your stories. Flash fiction has almost a poetic feeling and I think all of your stories are very smooth and relatable. I have a challenge for you, write a story that isn't depressing. Depressing stories are easy to write because humans tend to be more sensitive to negative emotions, but I would like to see you write a story that is positive. Anyway, I like this flash fiction thing and look forward to reading more. :)
7/21/2011 c8 5Apathetic Antichrist
Man, now I feel depressed about how much I don't matter to the universe. Thanks so much. Lol.
5Apathetic AntichristMan, now I feel depressed about how much I don't matter to the universe. Thanks so much. Lol.
6/28/2011 c5 19Mr. Random17
I feel like a lot, when people try to plan out your future for you. And I apologise, I spelt appreciated wrong in my last review...
19Mr. Random17I feel like a lot, when people try to plan out your future for you. And I apologise, I spelt appreciated wrong in my last review...
6/28/2011 c6 Mr. Random17
Hey, thanks for your review. It was muchly apprechiated. So, I read your flash fictions. They sound like short, well, short stories. You do them really well. They were very polished. I think I may try them, even though I'm notorious for going way over word limits XD. Thanks for the idea. Oh, and in regards to your comment about mine not being poetry, I struggled with thinking of a catagory to put them in, as they are neither fiction nor poetry. They jut are. *Shrug*
Hey, thanks for your review. It was muchly apprechiated. So, I read your flash fictions. They sound like short, well, short stories. You do them really well. They were very polished. I think I may try them, even though I'm notorious for going way over word limits XD. Thanks for the idea. Oh, and in regards to your comment about mine not being poetry, I struggled with thinking of a catagory to put them in, as they are neither fiction nor poetry. They jut are. *Shrug*
6/27/2011 c6 15Katalina Tomas
True, it's a little raw, maybe somewhat rough, but honestly, I loved it the way it was written, with the child's innocence masking the reality of her situation, which we can guess at given the clues.
Overall, very good.
15Katalina TomasTrue, it's a little raw, maybe somewhat rough, but honestly, I loved it the way it was written, with the child's innocence masking the reality of her situation, which we can guess at given the clues.
Overall, very good.
6/16/2011 c5 5Apathetic Antichrist
i think "It's Too Fast" is the one that really hits me. I feel the same way a lot.
5Apathetic Antichristi think "It's Too Fast" is the one that really hits me. I feel the same way a lot.
6/16/2011 c5 15Katalina Tomas
You're pretty good at writing these short stories. Personally, I tend to make mine way too short or scarily long... so good job on these. Can't wait for your update! :)
15Katalina TomasYou're pretty good at writing these short stories. Personally, I tend to make mine way too short or scarily long... so good job on these. Can't wait for your update! :)
6/9/2011 c4 3Youthful Abandon
This kind of follows the same path as your other story, but you did add enough to make it stand out on its own. I like the idea of the paper shredder. That was funny. And I do appreciate the fact that the character gives some thought to the reversal of roles. It gives her more depth.
3Youthful AbandonThis kind of follows the same path as your other story, but you did add enough to make it stand out on its own. I like the idea of the paper shredder. That was funny. And I do appreciate the fact that the character gives some thought to the reversal of roles. It gives her more depth.
6/9/2011 c2 Youthful Abandon
I think this one was different, but in a good way. I like that you did kind of develop why she felt out-of-place. The other characters, too, were contributing in the way that they treated her differently than all of the other customers, and that's good. I don't like when people mentioned are just cardboard cutouts, background pieces. You give every little bit of person a personality. I like it. I like it a lot.
I think this one was different, but in a good way. I like that you did kind of develop why she felt out-of-place. The other characters, too, were contributing in the way that they treated her differently than all of the other customers, and that's good. I don't like when people mentioned are just cardboard cutouts, background pieces. You give every little bit of person a personality. I like it. I like it a lot.
6/9/2011 c1 Youthful Abandon
Interesting. I like it so far. I really like the way you kind of came full circle with your ideas. You started talking about strength, then you developed your story, and then you returned to that idea of strength. You definitely have a talent for drabbles!
Interesting. I like it so far. I really like the way you kind of came full circle with your ideas. You started talking about strength, then you developed your story, and then you returned to that idea of strength. You definitely have a talent for drabbles!
6/2/2011 c2 3Pandora's Smile
You're really good at writing.
Personally, I always tend to have problems with just writing what I would feel in a situation. I know it's supposed to be easy, but I'm just having a hard time with that. I dunno if it's the same for you, but you're really doing a good job :)
3Pandora's SmileYou're really good at writing.
Personally, I always tend to have problems with just writing what I would feel in a situation. I know it's supposed to be easy, but I'm just having a hard time with that. I dunno if it's the same for you, but you're really doing a good job :)