for The Marrying Type6/10/2011 c1 MakingMyHeartBeatAgain
Bravo!
I like the way you started out the story and the way you introduced Louise to the story.
Overall, very enjoyable. There's nothing really I can say to work on other than the whole time lapse thing. It might have been better if you started off mentioning how long it'd been since Amalia had seen him and such to get the point that they had a history. It was kind of difficult to tell at first whether it was just someone she knew or not. You know?
That's the only thing I can really nit pick on in this story though and I enjoyed reading it! (:
Bravo!
I like the way you started out the story and the way you introduced Louise to the story.
Overall, very enjoyable. There's nothing really I can say to work on other than the whole time lapse thing. It might have been better if you started off mentioning how long it'd been since Amalia had seen him and such to get the point that they had a history. It was kind of difficult to tell at first whether it was just someone she knew or not. You know?
That's the only thing I can really nit pick on in this story though and I enjoyed reading it! (:
5/28/2011 c1 
13blurrylights
This was pretty good! I liked the way you wrote it- it wasn't pretentious, but you still got the feeling across. I also enjoyed that it wasn't a happy ending, because it definitely feels more realistic that way.
13blurrylightsThis was pretty good! I liked the way you wrote it- it wasn't pretentious, but you still got the feeling across. I also enjoyed that it wasn't a happy ending, because it definitely feels more realistic that way.