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for His Ocean Eyes

6/11/2011 c1 3Sole-Reverie
I found this to be very touching, calming, and utterly beautiful. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

-sole-reverie x
6/10/2011 c1 78Insanity Streak
This is such a beautiful and graceful piece of writing. There is so much love and contentment within this piece and it is so relaxing. I also feel a strong feeling of protection from this piece - like nothing could ever go wrong with those blue eyes watching me.

Your imagery is wonderful and you have some lovely lines. The last two lines are an obvious choice, yet the second stanza is splendid too. Gah, I love every line. You really have created something magical here. Bravo! :D
6/6/2011 c1 119SomeRandomScribbles
Great poem! I love how much emotion and meaning there is in this piece. The imagery conveys it well, and is beautiful - I love how you use natural and great images such as the sea and the sky, which reflects the nature of God :)

There are a couple of times where a bit more punctuation would help this piece - particularly full stops. I also wasn't very fond of how you separated the letters out in love and blue, as I felt it didn't really help the piece - but this is just personal preference :)

I really like the rhyming in this piece; the occasional rhyme helps it flow, and the final rhyming couplet gives the piece a definite ending.

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