for Inside My Closet2/17/2012 c44 
75thewhimsicalbard
Thanks for posting this new placeholder chapter, so that I can comment and give you a gentle, nudging reminder to continue to write this enjoyable high school semidrama. I rather miss it.
-twb
75thewhimsicalbardThanks for posting this new placeholder chapter, so that I can comment and give you a gentle, nudging reminder to continue to write this enjoyable high school semidrama. I rather miss it.
-twb
11/23/2011 c44 inactive-2105
So I'm just now getting back to this story, and it's as good as I remember. Good work :) and I really like Griffin for some reason.
So I'm just now getting back to this story, and it's as good as I remember. Good work :) and I really like Griffin for some reason.
10/17/2011 c44 2Musique Faerie
Sure, apologies accepted.
And I haven't updated my stories too (and it's likely that I won't update them anymore.)
I would love to see the 'finished product' mentioned, as well as the new chapter for this and the new novel come mid-November.
But for now, we'll have to wait for a long time.
Laters soon.
2Musique FaerieSure, apologies accepted.
And I haven't updated my stories too (and it's likely that I won't update them anymore.)
I would love to see the 'finished product' mentioned, as well as the new chapter for this and the new novel come mid-November.
But for now, we'll have to wait for a long time.
Laters soon.
10/17/2011 c44 Traquor
I totally understand. I've also been preparing for NaNoWriMo, so you're forgiven.^ ^ And if you have time to update during November, I'll be in awe. LOL. Whenever November rolls around, I find myself glued to the keyboard, moaning incomprehensible things that resemble, "...just...two thousand more...words...arggh" xD.
I totally understand. I've also been preparing for NaNoWriMo, so you're forgiven.^ ^ And if you have time to update during November, I'll be in awe. LOL. Whenever November rolls around, I find myself glued to the keyboard, moaning incomprehensible things that resemble, "...just...two thousand more...words...arggh" xD.
10/6/2011 c43 Musique Faerie
Alright, I haven't been on this site for a while now, with school and all.
Now that the individualistic girl has intorduced herself, I would guess that Christine and her would be friends. (I'm not sure if I've mentioned this in last review, but I don't care.) It's as if they met on the first day of school, not during the school year...that's just what I thought.
Please update soon.
Whoa, I didn't know I get mentioned...again.
Alright, I haven't been on this site for a while now, with school and all.
Now that the individualistic girl has intorduced herself, I would guess that Christine and her would be friends. (I'm not sure if I've mentioned this in last review, but I don't care.) It's as if they met on the first day of school, not during the school year...that's just what I thought.
Please update soon.
Whoa, I didn't know I get mentioned...again.
10/3/2011 c43 75thewhimsicalbard
While I have enjoyed this story to this point, the past two chapters make me want to point something out, though I'm going to do it in a roundabout way.
I told you about that one fan fiction story I wrote that functions a lot like this one, I recall; one thing that I remember about my early efforts in organizing the events in each chapter was that each "event" had to be in a different chapter.
Look at the difference action between chapters 37-38 and then chapters 39-43. You have double the action in half the chapters. Don't worry so much about all of the chapters being the same length word-wise; I'd go more for keeping the action and emotional flow between them equal.
Other than that, there's nothing at all wrong with your story. I do love the very deliberate way that this story progresses. It's very nice to see. Like I said before, it always makes my day a little better.
-twb
75thewhimsicalbardWhile I have enjoyed this story to this point, the past two chapters make me want to point something out, though I'm going to do it in a roundabout way.
I told you about that one fan fiction story I wrote that functions a lot like this one, I recall; one thing that I remember about my early efforts in organizing the events in each chapter was that each "event" had to be in a different chapter.
Look at the difference action between chapters 37-38 and then chapters 39-43. You have double the action in half the chapters. Don't worry so much about all of the chapters being the same length word-wise; I'd go more for keeping the action and emotional flow between them equal.
Other than that, there's nothing at all wrong with your story. I do love the very deliberate way that this story progresses. It's very nice to see. Like I said before, it always makes my day a little better.
-twb
10/3/2011 c43 Traquor
ohh, I love sparkles and brownies and highest praises!xD. Thanks, and nice drabble. We have a proper name for bubblegum girl now,and i feel like things are going to get interesting. ^^
ohh, I love sparkles and brownies and highest praises!xD. Thanks, and nice drabble. We have a proper name for bubblegum girl now,and i feel like things are going to get interesting. ^^
9/21/2011 c42 2Musique Faerie
I wonder if they would become friends. Oh, I can't wait to read more.
And I am reading the new chapter of Found.
Yeah, right now.
2Musique FaerieI wonder if they would become friends. Oh, I can't wait to read more.
And I am reading the new chapter of Found.
Yeah, right now.
9/21/2011 c42 Traquor
haha, I really don't want to know her name. I want to keep calling her Bubblegum girl, lol. good drabble. But, when you say she "shoved" the notebook back into her hands, "shoved" is kind of a forceful, negative-feeling word, and it makes you think she's going to be hostile.
...Unless that's the point, which I just thought could totally be a possibility, xD
Anyway, you rock. Here's a bag of chocolate chip cookies for your wonderfulness.
haha, I really don't want to know her name. I want to keep calling her Bubblegum girl, lol. good drabble. But, when you say she "shoved" the notebook back into her hands, "shoved" is kind of a forceful, negative-feeling word, and it makes you think she's going to be hostile.
...Unless that's the point, which I just thought could totally be a possibility, xD
Anyway, you rock. Here's a bag of chocolate chip cookies for your wonderfulness.
9/12/2011 c41 BitterMagic
"Good for you!" :'D
Noms on the brownies and cupcakes after flicking off the sprinkles.
"You're welcome and you better feel teased!" x'D "Or I'll 'tease' you some more" ;'p
"Good for you!" :'D
Noms on the brownies and cupcakes after flicking off the sprinkles.
"You're welcome and you better feel teased!" x'D "Or I'll 'tease' you some more" ;'p
9/11/2011 c20 6Arsideus
Oh, I'm really enjoying this story, it has such an interesting spin to it and you captured highschool perfectly! :D i gotta say, I can't BELIEVE FictionPress doesn't have stricter rules on copyrights and I've e-mailed them countless times to no response! *sigh*
But that's besides the point-I enjoyed your description and the vividness of the characters.
Moar please! ^^
Arsideus
6ArsideusOh, I'm really enjoying this story, it has such an interesting spin to it and you captured highschool perfectly! :D i gotta say, I can't BELIEVE FictionPress doesn't have stricter rules on copyrights and I've e-mailed them countless times to no response! *sigh*
But that's besides the point-I enjoyed your description and the vividness of the characters.
Moar please! ^^
Arsideus
9/7/2011 c41 Traquor
oooh, confrontation alert! i hate when that kind of stuff happens, like you say something about someone and lo and behold, they're standing right behind you, lol. good snippet, and keep 'em coming. : )
oooh, confrontation alert! i hate when that kind of stuff happens, like you say something about someone and lo and behold, they're standing right behind you, lol. good snippet, and keep 'em coming. : )
9/7/2011 c41 2Musique Faerie
And we're left to wonder at the end whether Bubblegum girl looked inside the notebook...I wonder how she felt as she gave her the notebook. Anger? Happiness? Excitement? Or simply a neutral look on her face?
Congrats on having more reviews!
Update soon...
2Musique FaerieAnd we're left to wonder at the end whether Bubblegum girl looked inside the notebook...I wonder how she felt as she gave her the notebook. Anger? Happiness? Excitement? Or simply a neutral look on her face?
Congrats on having more reviews!
Update soon...