for Secrets of the Gods8/16/2011 c12 Dragonclaw289
I'm glad Eric finally came back. And now I can't wait to see if Mia kicks Aarons butt next chapter
I'm glad Eric finally came back. And now I can't wait to see if Mia kicks Aarons butt next chapter
8/12/2011 c11 Dragonclaw289
This chapter made me laugh, great job:)
Though I have to admit I get kinda confused some times with the names.
This chapter made me laugh, great job:)
Though I have to admit I get kinda confused some times with the names.
8/12/2011 c11 
13the ticking clock
pure amazingness...this chapter was spectacular. The whole interaction between Mia and Henri was so clear and real to me, I could picture the whole thing perfectly. And the scene where Aretmis really does the course was so breathtaking, espically the flashback scene with Apollo and Aretimis arguing about the wolves. That made me smile.
Are you a mortal instruments fan? I think the quote: "i use my rapier wit to hide my inner pain." Is something Jace said. If not, then it is just a concidance, but I love that line and it made me smile.
My only suggestion is that you could have described Mia's emotion a bit more during the whole: falling/catching scenes. It would have made it seem more dramatic then it was, and spread the tension out a bit more. only a suggestion...
I really loved the ending to this chapter and can't wait for more! Keep it up!
13the ticking clockpure amazingness...this chapter was spectacular. The whole interaction between Mia and Henri was so clear and real to me, I could picture the whole thing perfectly. And the scene where Aretmis really does the course was so breathtaking, espically the flashback scene with Apollo and Aretimis arguing about the wolves. That made me smile.
Are you a mortal instruments fan? I think the quote: "i use my rapier wit to hide my inner pain." Is something Jace said. If not, then it is just a concidance, but I love that line and it made me smile.
My only suggestion is that you could have described Mia's emotion a bit more during the whole: falling/catching scenes. It would have made it seem more dramatic then it was, and spread the tension out a bit more. only a suggestion...
I really loved the ending to this chapter and can't wait for more! Keep it up!
8/11/2011 c9 the ticking clock
i am in love with this story. seriously.
the scene where uncel carl explains to them that they are the god was EPIC. really, really well done.
I would like to see each of them discovering and training their "powers" and talents in the next couple chapters, a couple gods a chapter, with diffrent point of views, but that is just my personal idea, do whatever you want.
great job, I will be on the look out for more amazing chapters!
i am in love with this story. seriously.
the scene where uncel carl explains to them that they are the god was EPIC. really, really well done.
I would like to see each of them discovering and training their "powers" and talents in the next couple chapters, a couple gods a chapter, with diffrent point of views, but that is just my personal idea, do whatever you want.
great job, I will be on the look out for more amazing chapters!
8/11/2011 c8 the ticking clock
this chapter was absuloutly AMAZING! so funny. espically this part:"Oh, for the god's sake, Ares," I snapped, "You're an immortal god. You know as well as I do that the sword wouldn't have even put a dent in you. Get over it."
so funny. this whole section with them transforming into their true selves was done really, really, well. But, I am a bit confused. they are actaully the gods and godesses, or are they gods just taking possesion of them?
anways, amazing stuff, keep it up!
this chapter was absuloutly AMAZING! so funny. espically this part:"Oh, for the god's sake, Ares," I snapped, "You're an immortal god. You know as well as I do that the sword wouldn't have even put a dent in you. Get over it."
so funny. this whole section with them transforming into their true selves was done really, really, well. But, I am a bit confused. they are actaully the gods and godesses, or are they gods just taking possesion of them?
anways, amazing stuff, keep it up!
8/11/2011 c7 the ticking clock
BEST.CHAPTER.YET.
pure amazingness. I loved the dialogue and the interaction between all the siblings, espically during the battle scene. And when Mia was tied to the bed, and just, wow, this whole chapter was incredable!
BEST.CHAPTER.YET.
pure amazingness. I loved the dialogue and the interaction between all the siblings, espically during the battle scene. And when Mia was tied to the bed, and just, wow, this whole chapter was incredable!
8/11/2011 c6 the ticking clock
I LOVE where this story is going! keep it up! Aretimis's revelations and the end of the chapter made my heart pound. This truly is an exceptional story!
I LOVE where this story is going! keep it up! Aretimis's revelations and the end of the chapter made my heart pound. This truly is an exceptional story!
8/11/2011 c4 the ticking clock
:) aah...the trip wire part was hilerious, and I loved the ending...Eric gonna tell her who she is? maybe...
:) aah...the trip wire part was hilerious, and I loved the ending...Eric gonna tell her who she is? maybe...
8/11/2011 c3 the ticking clock
I don't think this chapter is pointless at all...it introduces Uncle Carl(i am wondering who he REALLY is) and we get nice insight into our main charecters and learn a little more about them. Great chapter, actaully.
I don't think this chapter is pointless at all...it introduces Uncle Carl(i am wondering who he REALLY is) and we get nice insight into our main charecters and learn a little more about them. Great chapter, actaully.
8/11/2011 c2 the ticking clock
this was fun to read, espically because Artemis is so blind to who she is. the end was intriguing...can't wait for more!
this was fun to read, espically because Artemis is so blind to who she is. the end was intriguing...can't wait for more!
8/11/2011 c1 the ticking clock
LOVE it. this story is amazing. The first sentance lures you in, and the rest of the chapter is captivating enough that you never want to stop reading. I love your style. It is really fun to read, and has almost a sarcastic, bored tone to it that perfectly fits Eros. was Eros a charecter from Greek mythology? I love the idea of Hermes and Apollo joking around with dumping water buckets on teacher's head. :)
this story has AWESOME potential, keep it up!
LOVE it. this story is amazing. The first sentance lures you in, and the rest of the chapter is captivating enough that you never want to stop reading. I love your style. It is really fun to read, and has almost a sarcastic, bored tone to it that perfectly fits Eros. was Eros a charecter from Greek mythology? I love the idea of Hermes and Apollo joking around with dumping water buckets on teacher's head. :)
this story has AWESOME potential, keep it up!
8/4/2011 c10 6Jeremiah St. Bluefire
Can I just say...WAY BETTER THEN PERCY JACKSON...Just the way you described how the training grounds left me breathless, giving such a vivid portrayal of how the place looks. I WANT TO BE THERE NOW :(
*Ahem* But anyways, absolutely lovely chapter
6Jeremiah St. BluefireCan I just say...WAY BETTER THEN PERCY JACKSON...Just the way you described how the training grounds left me breathless, giving such a vivid portrayal of how the place looks. I WANT TO BE THERE NOW :(
*Ahem* But anyways, absolutely lovely chapter