for Faerie Goddragon6/2/2016 c1 Guest
I had to come back and tell you how utterly adorable and wonderful this story was. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you!
I had to come back and tell you how utterly adorable and wonderful this story was. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you!
7/9/2013 c9 Impressed
I enjoyed the story very much.
The plot is great, despite being very short.
My favorite part is when she refuses to marry him and consents to an engagement. It was a brilliant twist, and stopped the second half being too cliche.
Good Luck!
I enjoyed the story very much.
The plot is great, despite being very short.
My favorite part is when she refuses to marry him and consents to an engagement. It was a brilliant twist, and stopped the second half being too cliche.
Good Luck!
8/30/2012 c9 Princess Mariana
This was great! They are so ctue together! I hope that you write a sequel, even if it's just a one-shot. :)
This was great! They are so ctue together! I hope that you write a sequel, even if it's just a one-shot. :)
7/19/2012 c9 BlackCatsLuck
This is probably one of the awesomest stories I have ever read. You do need to write a sequel especially because Kassha and Yelnoir didn't actually get married and we don't get to hear about Kasshas adventures. So please pretty please with a cherry on top WRITE A SEQUEL!
This is probably one of the awesomest stories I have ever read. You do need to write a sequel especially because Kassha and Yelnoir didn't actually get married and we don't get to hear about Kasshas adventures. So please pretty please with a cherry on top WRITE A SEQUEL!
8/4/2011 c9 thegreatfirehawk
i love this story sooo much. one of my new favorites. you should do a seqeul
i love this story sooo much. one of my new favorites. you should do a seqeul
8/1/2011 c2 Whispers in Alcatraz
Kassha is a mary-sue. That's all I'm offering right now.
You have fallen into the trap of the mary-sue.
Kassha is a wonderful, beautiful, cultured, one of the best dancers, with a voice like a rainbow of sound.
Llulshad's character isn't explored nearly enough for my liking either. Where are their personality quirks, their likes and dislikes?
Kassha description doesn't help either. Beautiful brown hair and all that. Detail is good, but when it is only about your character,it isn't very welcome.
And the most common happening in a mary-sue is when they have more than one middle name.
I'm totally serious.
Where is the girl's stubborness and why haven't you expanded on Kassha's brothers? Where is their interaction other than sword practice?
Come on girl, you can do better than this. I'm sure you can.
Oh, and read some Mary-sue parodies. They're all over the place. Just type in mary-sue and you'll get loads. That way, you can read up on what mary-sues are and all that.
Even if you do know about mary-sues and their symptoms, you'll have to do a lot better job at avoiding it.
~Ciao~
Kassha is a mary-sue. That's all I'm offering right now.
You have fallen into the trap of the mary-sue.
Kassha is a wonderful, beautiful, cultured, one of the best dancers, with a voice like a rainbow of sound.
Llulshad's character isn't explored nearly enough for my liking either. Where are their personality quirks, their likes and dislikes?
Kassha description doesn't help either. Beautiful brown hair and all that. Detail is good, but when it is only about your character,it isn't very welcome.
And the most common happening in a mary-sue is when they have more than one middle name.
I'm totally serious.
Where is the girl's stubborness and why haven't you expanded on Kassha's brothers? Where is their interaction other than sword practice?
Come on girl, you can do better than this. I'm sure you can.
Oh, and read some Mary-sue parodies. They're all over the place. Just type in mary-sue and you'll get loads. That way, you can read up on what mary-sues are and all that.
Even if you do know about mary-sues and their symptoms, you'll have to do a lot better job at avoiding it.
~Ciao~
7/3/2011 c9 
4Krenaya
Very nicely done. I would rank it close to the top of my favourite story list. The descriptions were simplistically marvelous. The tone of the story was engaging too.
4KrenayaVery nicely done. I would rank it close to the top of my favourite story list. The descriptions were simplistically marvelous. The tone of the story was engaging too.
7/2/2011 c9 16mizgardenia21
Awwwwwww I LOVED this story. It was absolutely amazing. And I look forward to a sequel if you get the chance to write it and finish it. Kassha is a strange princess but she's an awesome strange princess. I loved the ending it fit so neatly into the whole tale. I'm a little bit sad that this was so short but I look forward to your next story.
16mizgardenia21Awwwwwww I LOVED this story. It was absolutely amazing. And I look forward to a sequel if you get the chance to write it and finish it. Kassha is a strange princess but she's an awesome strange princess. I loved the ending it fit so neatly into the whole tale. I'm a little bit sad that this was so short but I look forward to your next story.
6/30/2011 c8 1Devanelle
This story is very interesting, I really ejoyed it so far. Can't wait for the next chapter:)
1DevanelleThis story is very interesting, I really ejoyed it so far. Can't wait for the next chapter:)
6/30/2011 c8 16mizgardenia21
Go Kassha, go Kassha, go Kassha...wooo hoo! Amazing! I don't think I would have been able to just charge in the middle of poachers like that! And Akrindi must look so cute in it's chick state...Awwwww. I wonder what happened to the poachers? Awesome chapter...this story is keeping me on my toes. I'm definitely getting practice in expecting the unexpected here.
16mizgardenia21Go Kassha, go Kassha, go Kassha...wooo hoo! Amazing! I don't think I would have been able to just charge in the middle of poachers like that! And Akrindi must look so cute in it's chick state...Awwwww. I wonder what happened to the poachers? Awesome chapter...this story is keeping me on my toes. I'm definitely getting practice in expecting the unexpected here.
6/28/2011 c7 mizgardenia21
Poor Llulshad, she has to go find the wayward yet gutsy princess. I'm glad it finally got a chance to tell the king a thing or two. I was cheering for it all the way for facing up to the king. And I Loved the part about the acid it spits out. What an interesting ability. I wonder why Kassha decided to face the phoenix on her own?
Poor Llulshad, she has to go find the wayward yet gutsy princess. I'm glad it finally got a chance to tell the king a thing or two. I was cheering for it all the way for facing up to the king. And I Loved the part about the acid it spits out. What an interesting ability. I wonder why Kassha decided to face the phoenix on her own?
6/27/2011 c6 5Cecily Mitchell
So excited to see what's next! I really love the way she's pushing at the boundaries of the society she lives in and I wish Kassha all the best
5Cecily MitchellSo excited to see what's next! I really love the way she's pushing at the boundaries of the society she lives in and I wish Kassha all the best