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6/19/2011 c1 arrhythmias
'yet in my moments of awakeness,/ i am standing on a cliff edge where/ i want to walk away but a figure stands,/ holding me back and with a word he tips/ me over the edge to fall into fog.'

i love that part.
6/15/2011 c1 Tytherpol
weird it sounds like i coulda written this though i woulda cut each stanza in half

good good i suppose haha
6/15/2011 c1 cab fed hig
"a constant background melody of slams" - harsh. as i read on, i'm more and more convinced you've picked life's perfect metaphor.

"he tips/me over the edge to fall into fog." - the 'maze' beginning meets a confused, 'fog'gy end, it's like the cyclical nature of life. this is so intelligently (and tragically) written. great

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