for A High School Love Story9/2/2011 c8 
4asheepiage
nawwwwww how sweet :D I wonder who the girl who was waving her arms around is? hmmmmmmm cant wait to find out though! Update soon! asheepiage.
4asheepiagenawwwwww how sweet :D I wonder who the girl who was waving her arms around is? hmmmmmmm cant wait to find out though! Update soon! asheepiage.
7/24/2011 c6 9DoReMe22
This is beautifully written, and Shiloh's character reminds me a lot of Sophie from Howl's Moving Castle...please go on =)
9DoReMe22This is beautifully written, and Shiloh's character reminds me a lot of Sophie from Howl's Moving Castle...please go on =)
7/6/2011 c4 3Jude Blake Gabriel
no rush but AHHH! i needz to find out about Rowan!
update soon plz :)
3Jude Blake Gabrielno rush but AHHH! i needz to find out about Rowan!
update soon plz :)
6/25/2011 c3 4SaraEsperlo
This is written very well and I love how the second chapter was devoted to her character. It helps to really know Shiloh as we get more into the plot for relating to her. I can't wait to hear more... I really hope there will be more about the little girl, I'm so curious about her too now. It's just the kind of scene that would have caught my attention as well.
4SaraEsperloThis is written very well and I love how the second chapter was devoted to her character. It helps to really know Shiloh as we get more into the plot for relating to her. I can't wait to hear more... I really hope there will be more about the little girl, I'm so curious about her too now. It's just the kind of scene that would have caught my attention as well.
6/23/2011 c3 3Jude Blake Gabriel
Another tip.
Separate your conversations from the actual paragraphs. it helps so that you don't mix up which character is saying what.
besides that i love where this is heading otherwise. keep going. Derek seems like he will be some trouble to deal with so we'll see.
3Jude Blake GabrielAnother tip.
Separate your conversations from the actual paragraphs. it helps so that you don't mix up which character is saying what.
besides that i love where this is heading otherwise. keep going. Derek seems like he will be some trouble to deal with so we'll see.
6/22/2011 c1 Jude Blake Gabriel
Nice start. It certainly holds my interest and i will continue reading.
Just one problem with this chapter. Don't take this the wrong way or anything but it's something i do when i write and you should too. Paragraphs instead of one clustered bundle of words. But other than that this is well written. Everyone make mistakes, even me, keep at it. I will continue reading.
Nice start. It certainly holds my interest and i will continue reading.
Just one problem with this chapter. Don't take this the wrong way or anything but it's something i do when i write and you should too. Paragraphs instead of one clustered bundle of words. But other than that this is well written. Everyone make mistakes, even me, keep at it. I will continue reading.