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7/28/2011 c1 67moongazer7
It's a little too short for me to determine if I enjoy the story or not and the story sounds a little hackneyed. It's over done. there's a lot of stories like this one out there that you summarize. even for a prologue make something happen, don't just summarize.
6/19/2011 c1 3Rosemarysgraden001
Ok revieiwing ur story finally lol.

I liked it ,it could go places. I would have to see what you do next to see what i think.

~Rose~
6/19/2011 c1 99Dreamers-Requiem
The only suggestion I really have for this is to cut the prologue. Yes, I'd like to read on, but the prologue itself gives away too much of the story - I'd rather see these things happening than be told about it. So far, I feel like I know exactly what is going to happen, which makes me feel "Why should I read on?" It is just a suggestion, and it's my own feelings on it.
6/16/2011 c1 34DanielStalwart
it sounds cliched but hey everything nowdays rips off everything in the past be it music, writing, design and much more

The plot is ok, just don't give stereotypical plots that are predictable and it will go fine

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