for As yet untitled7/24/2011 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
Despite how short this is, I think it's a really good opening. And great idea on trying to get out of the constant editing frame of mind. It's a strong start, and makes me really wonder what is going on here. Good style, too, and tone. I didn't notice mistakes or anything to critique really. I hope you do more of this.
99Dreamers-RequiemDespite how short this is, I think it's a really good opening. And great idea on trying to get out of the constant editing frame of mind. It's a strong start, and makes me really wonder what is going on here. Good style, too, and tone. I didn't notice mistakes or anything to critique really. I hope you do more of this.