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1/30/2012 c1 2FightXRun
Nice! So is Dak an alien/man? Sounds pretty cool nonetheless. I'd like to see what happens next!

One thing you could try to avoid is using the same word in like multiple sentences back to back. Like: "He walked back the way he came and exited back into the markets. Dak made it back to his room without any other interruptions."

And another thing I too, would be to add a few more descriptions like you had in the beginning paragraph. If you don't want to elaborate on everything all at once, just adding a few descriptive words could help, since this is on a different world than normal.

Besides, I like it! Nice cliffhanger too by the way.

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