for Under the Influence11/8/2016 c27 Michelle
This story is amazing, the grip and suspension is unreal. Honestly if this a book to buy I would of happily brought it.
This story is amazing, the grip and suspension is unreal. Honestly if this a book to buy I would of happily brought it.
11/8/2016 c27 cazyshell
I loved this story the grip you have. Although I guessed what was happening in some parts it was interesting to see how it played out. If this was available to buy I would buy it.
I loved this story the grip you have. Although I guessed what was happening in some parts it was interesting to see how it played out. If this was available to buy I would buy it.
12/23/2014 c6 
4pumadelic
I generally never review Chap by Chap as I like to get the flow - your first person narrators are all very believable and compelling.
I would have liked more backstory on Ariadne...I know abortion is a bigger issue in the US than it is here in the UK but it would have been good to know about why she felt so driven to conceal her situation other than pure denial...it's the sort of thing that happened a lot in rural Ireland ..but then denial can be very powerful
One point: it makes economic sense but would clued in psychologists who care actually put Anya in a room with anyone? Obviously it is also essential for your story.
Anya's likely manipulation of Nadia - will she make her do her dirty work - is a great cliffhanger.
4pumadelicI generally never review Chap by Chap as I like to get the flow - your first person narrators are all very believable and compelling.
I would have liked more backstory on Ariadne...I know abortion is a bigger issue in the US than it is here in the UK but it would have been good to know about why she felt so driven to conceal her situation other than pure denial...it's the sort of thing that happened a lot in rural Ireland ..but then denial can be very powerful
One point: it makes economic sense but would clued in psychologists who care actually put Anya in a room with anyone? Obviously it is also essential for your story.
Anya's likely manipulation of Nadia - will she make her do her dirty work - is a great cliffhanger.
8/19/2013 c14 RainfallSeven
I'm reading this after reading 'Anya', which I hope you're still writing. I prefer the 3rd person narration of 'Anya' but this one works too. I like the character of Anya, which is probably strange. Because she doesn't appear in the sequel, I'm guessing Nadia is going to die in this.
For this chapter 14, my computer's just giving me a repeat of the previous chapter instead of the new one.
I'm reading this after reading 'Anya', which I hope you're still writing. I prefer the 3rd person narration of 'Anya' but this one works too. I like the character of Anya, which is probably strange. Because she doesn't appear in the sequel, I'm guessing Nadia is going to die in this.
For this chapter 14, my computer's just giving me a repeat of the previous chapter instead of the new one.
9/24/2011 c27 JadiStomjade
Wow. This story is so awesome. I love the Zarander pairing! Anya...she's so evil and epic! Who's she going to kill next? BAMBUMBUUUUUM!
Wow. This story is so awesome. I love the Zarander pairing! Anya...she's so evil and epic! Who's she going to kill next? BAMBUMBUUUUUM!
8/29/2011 c10 4Sapphire Ox
God dang you're a great writer! I can't believe how much of a bitch Anya is! I can't wait to figure out why she's even there!
4Sapphire OxGod dang you're a great writer! I can't believe how much of a bitch Anya is! I can't wait to figure out why she's even there!
8/23/2011 c2 17greenforests
I felt some of this dragged on a bit. I liked the bickering between everyone, but found that having so many characters was at times hard to follow. I also found Naomi a bit too chipper when trying to get people to join in (Group therapists that I've had were more sombre and didn't ask how everyone was individually but instead tried to start group conversations to get everyone talking then moved onto more personal things). Haha. I like Anya, I've known a lot of people like her. I also like Zara.
17greenforestsI felt some of this dragged on a bit. I liked the bickering between everyone, but found that having so many characters was at times hard to follow. I also found Naomi a bit too chipper when trying to get people to join in (Group therapists that I've had were more sombre and didn't ask how everyone was individually but instead tried to start group conversations to get everyone talking then moved onto more personal things). Haha. I like Anya, I've known a lot of people like her. I also like Zara.
8/23/2011 c1 greenforests
I quite like this so far. I found that Naomi's past relationship with Ethan to be a bit of a cliche, but moving on. I liked how you introduced all the patients, giving us a glimpse into why they are there and their personalities. I also found Naomi's narration to be quite mature and believable, I could sense her genuine care. Besides the typos and grammatical errors it's a great first chapter.
-J
I quite like this so far. I found that Naomi's past relationship with Ethan to be a bit of a cliche, but moving on. I liked how you introduced all the patients, giving us a glimpse into why they are there and their personalities. I also found Naomi's narration to be quite mature and believable, I could sense her genuine care. Besides the typos and grammatical errors it's a great first chapter.
-J