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12/6/2011 c1 4AshlynHibbs
I didn't expect the ending! Very nice.

It got a little more awkward than I expected, but it had a good atmosphere that kept me reading.

Its best element was how odd it was.

It's sick, and it's horrible, and it's distasteful.

THAT'S what makes it good!

I'm adding this to my favorite list, and you are going on both my alert and favorite lists.)

Keep it up, my friend!~

(By the way,I saw your post on the Hidden Here forum. That's why I came. Just thought I'd let you know that someone saw your post! ;) )
10/9/2011 c1 20Claire LeBoeuf
Positivly wicked. I adore the way this was written. You seen to have a good grasp on human phsycoligy. The stoy was exactly what a good 'twisted' story whould be. Grotesque, desperate, and unrelenting. I appluade you.

Keep Writing!

-Claire
7/17/2011 c1 15Katalina Tomas
God... this was creepy. This was very well written, and it honestly sent a shiver down my spine.
7/14/2011 c1 1DeadlyGlamourous
Woah haha xD

I like how you didn't use rape and big offensive words (don't really know what to call them) and still made it gruesume and sickly if that makes sense?

I like it. This is a good subject because well, unfortunately a lot of this happens around the world :/. Parental abuse, incest etc.

I think I found a small mistake " tasting up it all up" did you mean tasting it all up? You repeated up two times ;p. Happens here a lot with words lol. Anyway that was the only one I found. Great job:) Enjoyed thes tory could really picture it ek o.o lol but I like these types of stories.

-yli.
7/8/2011 c1 Revenge Is Bliss
Only mistake I could find was in the summary. Obsession is spelled wrong.

You've done a great job describing this man, however horrible he may be. This was quite disturbing, yet enjoyable all the same. The way you describe the man's vile thoughts makes it feel all the more real. Overall, this was an incredible story. I hope to read more from you soon.
7/8/2011 c1 3Rosemarysgraden001
first off the story was skeevy...*shudders*

It was very emotional and got creeoy has time went on. Despite the fact that there wasnt a background,it still pulled you in. It made you want to picture it and not want to picture it at the same time. I sort of wonder why the girl didn't runaway or something before her father killed her.

~Rose~
7/8/2011 c1 S. Alvette
Eep...that was...creepy. Not much else to say other than the ending was very unexpected. I thought the boy was going to get his ass kicked, but I guess not...
7/8/2011 c1 62YFIQ
This reminds me of the time when I saw two people making out at the school's steps. I was disgusted so I took out my .45 and nailed them both. Later I tried to dump their body into the trash but they wouldn't fit.

I got caught and was suspended for a week.
7/8/2011 c1 1A-new-colour
right... that was brutal... guess that was what was supposed to happen though...great, now i have chills down my spine...
7/7/2011 c1 5SimonClemens
Good god, that was brutal. Then again, obsession is never pretty, is it? I liked this a lot. It scared me very much. The little details he added in describing his daughter made this vaguely incestuous-sounding, adding to the distubrance this caused me. I laughed once, but only incredulously at his perception at was inhumane of him as a father.

Done rambling. Good writing. :)

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