for As It Is In Heaven7/24/2011 c1 
5Whirlymerle
Hey there,
I like how you characterized the setting you’ve created with the last city of earth; thriving on plastic surgery and whatnot is a nice touch. I think that you might want to watch your verb tense, because at times, you flip-flop between past and present.
~Merle
5WhirlymerleHey there,
I like how you characterized the setting you’ve created with the last city of earth; thriving on plastic surgery and whatnot is a nice touch. I think that you might want to watch your verb tense, because at times, you flip-flop between past and present.
~Merle
7/24/2011 c5 15disrhythmic
This is fascinating. :D Really, I can barely look away. The way you describe things, like Hunter's flashback, is awesome - really gritty and edgy. I've just fav'd this. ^^
15disrhythmicThis is fascinating. :D Really, I can barely look away. The way you describe things, like Hunter's flashback, is awesome - really gritty and edgy. I've just fav'd this. ^^
7/23/2011 c2 disrhythmic
You've got a very interesting, well-written concept here. :) Please continue! I really enjoyed this. :)
You've got a very interesting, well-written concept here. :) Please continue! I really enjoyed this. :)