for Untrustworthy7/25/2011 c2 
5ChimericalWrites
just as good as chapter 1! I'm a little confused as to what exactly Vira is. I'm hoping that will be cleared up later. Once again I love your descriptions.
5ChimericalWritesjust as good as chapter 1! I'm a little confused as to what exactly Vira is. I'm hoping that will be cleared up later. Once again I love your descriptions.
7/25/2011 c1 ChimericalWrites
I can honestly say this is the first story in three years on here that I have found with noteworthy vampires, kudos. Very nice, I loved the descriptions they were really good without being too long to distract the reader. There was one typo in the first paragraph where you put "Vein-tangling" instead of "Vein-tingling". Other than that I didn't spot any mistakes. The vocabulary was great as well. I look forward to the second chapter ^^.
~SoullessLove
I can honestly say this is the first story in three years on here that I have found with noteworthy vampires, kudos. Very nice, I loved the descriptions they were really good without being too long to distract the reader. There was one typo in the first paragraph where you put "Vein-tangling" instead of "Vein-tingling". Other than that I didn't spot any mistakes. The vocabulary was great as well. I look forward to the second chapter ^^.
~SoullessLove
7/25/2011 c5 Mimander
Poor Vira :( she's gone through so much. You've done a great job on this story, it's really easy to get into!
~Mimander
Poor Vira :( she's gone through so much. You've done a great job on this story, it's really easy to get into!
~Mimander
7/25/2011 c1 Mimander
This was actually really fun to read! I loved all the detail you put into it, it's obvious you really had the whole thing pictured in your head, I hope the rest of it is just as good as this chapter! This is very different from the stories I write but I enjoyed it a lot. So, now I'm going to go read the rest, thanks for writing this, you are truly talented.
~Mimander
This was actually really fun to read! I loved all the detail you put into it, it's obvious you really had the whole thing pictured in your head, I hope the rest of it is just as good as this chapter! This is very different from the stories I write but I enjoyed it a lot. So, now I'm going to go read the rest, thanks for writing this, you are truly talented.
~Mimander