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8/26/2011 c5 Z
just keep up the good work. though I am waiting for the moment when things turn really bad.
8/1/2011 c1 Z
wow... a story with me in the acknowledgements (blushing)...

Every of this type of stories is essentially nothing more than a mix of some elements the author likes... and I like yours :) (I want such a school !) Furthermore I want to know how it continues... So I'd say the story works quite well, well done :) !

Anything else? err... ah: same remark as the previous time: your writing isn't as smooth as it could be... you seem to be hopping from one thought to the other (which is rather normal of course) but the conncection between them isn't always made. Reading would be easier (and easier reading - reading on itself, not the thinking about it - makes happier readers) if that were more the case.

In short (as my Latin teachter used to say): What's good is good. But the better is better than the good and the best is better than the better - if you get what I mean ;)
7/31/2011 c1 muyany
Boo! guess who?

waw, I got an honorasy mention *blushes*

Res sure has a long name. Are you going to explain where all of them came

from?

I like Res, she seems so hopeless. I am slightly concerned by how both she and

Mira seem set on calling their teachers hot and cute. You had me laughing

several times, so that's always a good thing.

There are a few little things I wanted to point out or suggest, but it got out

of hand again. So you may or may not get that in the mailbox at some point.

Algrim has amber eyes? I didn't notice. I also like orange Pegasi.

I just noticed chapter 2 and 3 are up as well. They'll have to wait till

tomorrow though.

good luck

M.

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