for The Vines1/5/2012 c1 
12TheShadow666
Wo the end was totallyfreaky but amazzing! I loved reading this and the odd thibg going on with the vines. This is an awesome short story
12TheShadow666Wo the end was totallyfreaky but amazzing! I loved reading this and the odd thibg going on with the vines. This is an awesome short story
8/1/2011 c1 5Whirlymerle
Hey there, returning your review.
[are the only thing keeping the night restless] things
Wow, creepy. This piece feels like it’s a twisted Snow White story or something. I like this a lot as a one shot, and I think it started and ended strongly.
My one suggestion is that while I enjoy your many descriptions and rich, sensory imagery for the most part, at times, I feel like it’s too much, and slows down your narrative. For instance: [The closer I get, the more clear the features of the object grow.] I personally don’t see how this line contributes to the piece.
Good work,
~Merle
5WhirlymerleHey there, returning your review.
[are the only thing keeping the night restless] things
Wow, creepy. This piece feels like it’s a twisted Snow White story or something. I like this a lot as a one shot, and I think it started and ended strongly.
My one suggestion is that while I enjoy your many descriptions and rich, sensory imagery for the most part, at times, I feel like it’s too much, and slows down your narrative. For instance: [The closer I get, the more clear the features of the object grow.] I personally don’t see how this line contributes to the piece.
Good work,
~Merle