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8/26/2011 c1 1Germany
Haha, that's true. Packing - for me at least - is the hardest part when moving XD Such a pain...

Anyways, I'm curious as to why your main character is moving here. Maybe you're saving that for the next chapter or...?

Who knows. But it has caught my attention ever so slightly. The only thing I think you could fix was this line:

"leaving the place where you we're born"

I think you meant "were" for "we're" ;)
8/6/2011 c1 30Mukuwa.Renu.Koi

"My favorite place? My dreams" thats was idk..just an 'aww' moment.

anyway I rather liked this first chapter but I mean come on give me some more to work with. I cant wait to see where this shabang goes, and I like the name Valencia even is its like a city here haha but cool cool. Sad that her one friend left and 2 died like jeeze what the hell? thats kinda hard to believe must suck really bad. I hate when people loose touch to me its as if were you even friend to begin with? do friendships true ones die? anyway maybe getting off topic but yeah its happened.

So Hopefully you get around to updating soon ;)

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