for Viridian Recinde8/7/2011 c1 
13VelvetyCheerio
Review courtesy of the Review Marathon. Link in my profile.
I really liked how you used the word "through" repeatedly in the second stanza. It gave me an image of movement and scene changes which was surprisingly refreshing.
I also liked the voice in this poem. The way the verses are set up, and the phrases used just add this air of melancholy to the whole poem. I felt like I was reading about a part of life that was moving on and leaving a dear friend behind.
Good job!
Velvet.
13VelvetyCheerioReview courtesy of the Review Marathon. Link in my profile.
I really liked how you used the word "through" repeatedly in the second stanza. It gave me an image of movement and scene changes which was surprisingly refreshing.
I also liked the voice in this poem. The way the verses are set up, and the phrases used just add this air of melancholy to the whole poem. I felt like I was reading about a part of life that was moving on and leaving a dear friend behind.
Good job!
Velvet.