8/26/2011 c1 8reneelikeswhales
Wow. I love their powers. Pretty cool. The only thing I didn't get was the 'voice through the speaker' thing. For the majority of the story, I thought they were in a building, and the speakers had been hacked or something like that. But at the end I realised it was an earphone. Durr. Other than that and a few spelling and grammatical errors, it was pretty intense. My favourite character was Ashleigh by far. Mostly because she sounds a little sadistic.
All in all, good work. Can't wait for you to write the next one.
Cheers :D
Wow. I love their powers. Pretty cool. The only thing I didn't get was the 'voice through the speaker' thing. For the majority of the story, I thought they were in a building, and the speakers had been hacked or something like that. But at the end I realised it was an earphone. Durr. Other than that and a few spelling and grammatical errors, it was pretty intense. My favourite character was Ashleigh by far. Mostly because she sounds a little sadistic.
All in all, good work. Can't wait for you to write the next one.
Cheers :D
8/10/2011 c1 10Spirit Kissed
OHMYGOSH! FINALLY! I HAVE WAITED SOOOO LONG FOR THIS STORY! Lah Lah Lah... I love my part :P
OHMYGOSH! FINALLY! I HAVE WAITED SOOOO LONG FOR THIS STORY! Lah Lah Lah... I love my part :P