for Not By Blood12/11/2011 c5 Guest
Update soon plz plz plz plz! I love this story!
Update soon plz plz plz plz! I love this story!
11/25/2011 c5 
1PandahNinjah
I LOVE Transformers! Saw third one over the summer, it was freaking awesome, and I really want to get it on dvd!
My favorite is Optimus Prime!
1PandahNinjahI LOVE Transformers! Saw third one over the summer, it was freaking awesome, and I really want to get it on dvd!
My favorite is Optimus Prime!
11/13/2011 c5 2Annie not Annabel
Awesome story! I love Astrid. And Lucas. And Bryce. And... well, everyone.
Also, usually in American English, words that end in -ise (in English English) switch to -ize (in American English). For example, antagonise becomes antagonize, and fantasise becomes fantasize. Otherwise, your American dialect (that's not the right word) is lovely.
2Annie not AnnabelAwesome story! I love Astrid. And Lucas. And Bryce. And... well, everyone.
Also, usually in American English, words that end in -ise (in English English) switch to -ize (in American English). For example, antagonise becomes antagonize, and fantasise becomes fantasize. Otherwise, your American dialect (that's not the right word) is lovely.
11/5/2011 c5 4Emmaa x
"Hello, I don't believe we've had the pleasure of meeting." He smiled sweetly, but there was arrogance behind it.
"Well it may be pleasure for you, but I can assure you it's a one-sided thing." I looked him straight in the eye and returned his sweet smile with pure sarcasm.
He didn't seem fazed by my attitude. "I'm Bryce." He held out his hand towards me.
I looked at it, and then back up at him. "And I'm Pablo, are the introductions over yet?"
I suppose I was being harsh, but I really didn't like this dude, he just reeked of arrogance and that really bothered me, someone had to put him in his place.
"Ooh feisty, I like that." He replied smoothly.
"Ooh cocky, I hate that." I shot back.
"Hey, I'm the whole package. Tall, dark and handsome." I wanted to wipe that stupid flirtatious smirk off of his good looking face.
"Sure, when it's dark, you're handsome." I smirked straight back at him.
Tehe, this whole encounter made me laugh :D
Yey, school! Can't wait for more of that ;)
4Emmaa x"Hello, I don't believe we've had the pleasure of meeting." He smiled sweetly, but there was arrogance behind it.
"Well it may be pleasure for you, but I can assure you it's a one-sided thing." I looked him straight in the eye and returned his sweet smile with pure sarcasm.
He didn't seem fazed by my attitude. "I'm Bryce." He held out his hand towards me.
I looked at it, and then back up at him. "And I'm Pablo, are the introductions over yet?"
I suppose I was being harsh, but I really didn't like this dude, he just reeked of arrogance and that really bothered me, someone had to put him in his place.
"Ooh feisty, I like that." He replied smoothly.
"Ooh cocky, I hate that." I shot back.
"Hey, I'm the whole package. Tall, dark and handsome." I wanted to wipe that stupid flirtatious smirk off of his good looking face.
"Sure, when it's dark, you're handsome." I smirked straight back at him.
Tehe, this whole encounter made me laugh :D
Yey, school! Can't wait for more of that ;)
11/1/2011 c5 1Germany
Haha, I would react the same way Astrid did when seeing Lucas's car xD Actually, a teacher at one of the schools in my town has a car just like the transformers one, but it's lime green. Everytime our bus goes by the parking lot, we all gaze longingly at that car...
Sorry, for the ramble, it's early morning here in America so I'm quite random ;D Hmm, I haven't detected any non-American styles yet so you're doing fine so far. I see you've added another character to the cast - Bryce - so we'll see if he's a minor or major character. Happy writing :)
1GermanyHaha, I would react the same way Astrid did when seeing Lucas's car xD Actually, a teacher at one of the schools in my town has a car just like the transformers one, but it's lime green. Everytime our bus goes by the parking lot, we all gaze longingly at that car...
Sorry, for the ramble, it's early morning here in America so I'm quite random ;D Hmm, I haven't detected any non-American styles yet so you're doing fine so far. I see you've added another character to the cast - Bryce - so we'll see if he's a minor or major character. Happy writing :)