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1/31/2012 c2 2FightXRun
This story is pretty cool. Can't wait to see how they're connected.

Caught some inconsistencies/grammar things:

"The door slid open and Locke open fire on his assailants, two of the men fell dead and 5 more came up behind them."

Should be "Locke opened fire"

"Said one of the soldiers, his voice deep and distorted from the respirator in his helmet, the bright orange eyes of the helmet fading as locke drifted into the darkness."

Locke, needs to capitalized.

"Yes sir, we've taken care the target..."

Should be "taken care of the target"

Besides, Locke sounds pretty badass, especially by that last line. For now I like him better cause he's more of a mystery (less words about his perspective I guess). Anyway, keep up the good work!

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